Take a Trip from Reality

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Rondelet

Embrace the sea, Far out, a salty binge of air. Embrace the sea - Take a trip from reality. I’ll find a beach, beyond compare, Where natives play with much fanfare. Embrace the sea. Coconut palms, Port and Starboard sway, in warm air. Coconut palms, With their tropical-scented balms. Cut fruit open, sip island air. Underneath tree, hold rounded fare - Coconut palms Ship ahoy sad! Steering in the wrong direction. Ship ahoy sad - I care not to head home. I’m mad. Warm tan - I’ll miss this complexion. For the sea, I’ve such affection - Ship ahoy sad.

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Gershon Wolf

Date: 6/5/2025 7:38:00 PM

Love the rhythm and flow of these stanzas. I can almost feel the salt spray on my cheeks and the back of my neck. ~ Sailor Sam

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/6/2025 8:47:00 AM

((hugs))…thank you, Sammy

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 6/5/2025 1:39:00 AM

I'm a bad sailor. Prefer airplanes. Not now though. I'm almost hose bound. I love date palms, we have a lot of them. They look like coconut palms. Can imaging the milk inside. Lovely poem.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/5/2025 4:26:00 AM

Thank you, my friend! My dad, likewise, stays mostly home. He still drives short distances.

Paige Hind

Date: 6/4/2025 6:15:00 PM

Gorgeous writing, drawing in and out like the tide. I love how you set this up. "I care not to head home. I’m mad. Warm tan - I’ll miss this complexion" stunning lines, dear Kim

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/4/2025 7:15:00 PM

Thank you! glad you liked those lines xx