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Syntax of Vanishing

OPEN VERSE form, created by Brian Strand, uses spaces&breaks without grammatical symbols relies upon 'the one breath limitation' this intuitive cadence pemits the 'reader' (reciter) to respond in an interpretative - interplay unique to the ' happening


Written: September 17, 2026, for a contest by Bian Strand 
             
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  redemptive
   apprehensive
       pensive
            acatalepsy
               hours 
                  coil-topped 
                  ouroboros
               subliminal
              ashy 
           patinated
            yet
               atemporal
                   streamlined
                     a 
                     mnemonic 
                         ember

a
    disenthral
        hourglass 
             hymnody 
                ipseity
            apotheosis
         selving
             with
      secularized
  inanition
voracity

forsaken
  phantom
     of
     steeped 
        haunting
           oblivion
                cankered
                    & imprinted
                        vanished  
                       chronometer
                   incarnate
                obstinate
              receptive
           ritual
             of
        recurrence
     monolith
    paralysed
   beckoning
genesis

Breached 
  aether - 
     Influx
       gilded
         liminal
           whispering
                cadence
                   involving
                mellifluous 
             syllables &
            enigmatic
         syntax
     timelessness
   nothingness
distress
one syllable
   remains
         unoriginate
              inviolate&
                  breathing

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sara Etgen-Baker September 17, 2026 at 5:06 PM great job of the open verse format. I struggle with that form. Nicely done.

Daniel Henry Rodgers September 17, 2026 at 8:49 AM Hey SP, I’ve been taking in your poem and I like how you use Brian Strand’s open verse format to turn the poem itself into a living, breathing hourglass. The physical descent of the lines on the page visually mirrors the very unraveling and passage of time it describes. Well Done. Blessings, Daniel