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Poetic Form: Verse

Inspired: 2023 December 01

*4h Place*
A VERSE
Contest Judged: 2023 December 09
Sponsored by: Brian Strand

Image: Bent parking meters, downtown Hilo, Hawaii by the University of Washington

stealth makes a sound goes like this, S W O O S H death makes a sound goes like this, S W O O S H graves makes a sound goes like this, S W O O S H living makes a sound goes like this, ... ... ... ... ... >>> Hilo Town its bayfront underwater widest part funnel shaped its mouth face out towards ... the sea Hilo Bay underwater smallest part funnel shaped its spout face in towards ... Hilo Town S W O O S H ...

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Heidi Sands

Date: 12/10/2023 6:10:00 AM

Congratulations for your great win Hilo :)

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/10/2023 7:26:00 AM

Aloha, Heidi. Appreciate your thoughtful and kind share my friend. Aloha, William

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/10/2023 6:05:00 AM

Back with congratulations on your winning work in Brian's contest. Way to go. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Sara

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/10/2023 7:25:00 AM

Thanks, Sara. I appreciate your acknolegement. Aloha, William

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/1/2023 3:22:00 AM

Thanks for sharing. Interesting information about the stealth bomber. They were talking about it on the news the other day. Sara K..I will have to look up Hilo Town.

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/1/2023 3:41:00 AM

Alas, about a couple hundred lives lost in two that most know about, particularly, the elementary school that sat bayfront when it hit in the morning hours before school started, I think, and about 20+ mostly kids swept out to sea. Thanks for your great feedback, Sara. Aloha, William