Swim

cooling ocean swim
seeing bathing suits float by
sharks attack again

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Deb Radke

Date: 11/2/2018 10:16:00 AM

You set this up wonderfully. Another favorite for me. Concise, poetic and surprising. Well done. Deb

Warren Doll
Date: 11/4/2018 3:56:00 PM

Deb, I'm so glad that you have read another one of my poems. Thanks for all of your positive comments, All the best~Warren

J.W. Earnings

Date: 8/22/2018 1:19:00 AM

A very great poem here

Warren Doll
Date: 8/23/2018 8:22:00 AM

Thanks JW. I'm glad that you liked it.

Susan Ashley

Date: 7/21/2018 2:42:00 PM

Giggles! Oh I just love it!! A fun and fabulous Senryu, Warren. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Warren Doll
Date: 7/22/2018 5:03:00 PM

Susan, thanks for your positive comments and for your visit. All the best to you // Warren

Becca Teagan

Date: 7/20/2018 11:37:00 PM

lol Love it :)

Warren Doll
Date: 7/21/2018 11:17:00 AM

Glad that you liked it and thanks for the visit, Becca

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/13/2018 7:01:00 PM

oh my!! SHark attack!!

Warren Doll
Date: 7/15/2018 8:50:00 AM

The oceans vulture only the attack first then clean up the oceans, Thanks for you visit , Andrea.

Charlie Smith

Date: 7/10/2018 11:06:00 AM

Oh no!!! Fun one Warren...

Warren Doll
Date: 7/11/2018 8:37:00 AM

Glad you liked it, Charlie Thanks

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 7/8/2018 2:56:00 AM

I am laughing at the unexpected abruptness of the cooling ocean.

Warren Doll
Date: 7/8/2018 9:09:00 AM

I'm glad it made you laugh, Caren. // Warren:)

Mike Gentile

Date: 7/6/2018 12:26:00 PM

And I was hoping for skinny dipping, Oh Well Awesome, Warren!!

Warren Doll
Date: 7/6/2018 4:50:00 PM

Glad you liked it ,Mike.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/3/2018 8:07:00 AM

- I do not dare ... to swim with sharks - A great Senryu, Warren :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Warren Doll
Date: 7/3/2018 11:42:00 AM

Me either. I'm glad you liked it Anne-Lise. Sending a big hug your way. Warren:)

Lyric Man

Date: 7/3/2018 7:15:00 AM

It was going so beautifully until that last line ;)

Warren Doll
Date: 7/3/2018 7:33:00 AM

Thank you for your visit and comment, Lyric Man. //Warren.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 7/2/2018 10:07:00 PM

They are awesome creature's indeed, we enter their domain at our own risk.Warm weather seems to bring them in closer to our shores and of course people head for the beach when its warm, a bad combination for sure. Tom

Warren Doll
Date: 7/3/2018 7:30:00 AM

Great comment, Tom. Thank you for your visit. // Warren