Swim

cooling ocean swim
seeing bathing suits float by
sharks attack again

animaloceanviolencesenryu

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Deb Radke

November 2, 2018 at 10:16 AM

You set this up wonderfully. Another favorite for me. Concise, poetic and surprising. Well done. Deb

Warren Doll

November 4, 2018 at 3:56 PM

Deb, I'm so glad that you have read another one of my poems. Thanks for all of your positive comments, All the best~Warren

David William Breidenthal

August 22, 2018 at 1:19 AM

A very great poem here

Warren Doll

August 23, 2018 at 8:22 AM

Thanks JW. I'm glad that you liked it.

Susan Ashley

July 21, 2018 at 2:42 PM

Giggles! Oh I just love it!! A fun and fabulous Senryu, Warren. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Warren Doll

July 22, 2018 at 5:03 PM

Susan, thanks for your positive comments and for your visit. All the best to you // Warren

Becca Teagan

July 20, 2018 at 11:37 PM

lol Love it :)

Warren Doll

July 21, 2018 at 11:17 AM

Glad that you liked it and thanks for the visit, Becca

Andrea Dietrich

July 13, 2018 at 7:01 PM

oh my!! SHark attack!!

Warren Doll

July 15, 2018 at 8:50 AM

The oceans vulture only the attack first then clean up the oceans, Thanks for you visit , Andrea.

Charlie Smith

July 10, 2018 at 11:06 AM

Oh no!!! Fun one Warren...

Warren Doll

July 11, 2018 at 8:37 AM

Glad you liked it, Charlie Thanks

Caren Krutsinger

July 8, 2018 at 2:56 AM

I am laughing at the unexpected abruptness of the cooling ocean.

Warren Doll

July 8, 2018 at 9:09 AM

I'm glad it made you laugh, Caren. // Warren:)

Mike Gentile

July 6, 2018 at 12:26 PM

And I was hoping for skinny dipping, Oh Well Awesome, Warren!!

Warren Doll

July 6, 2018 at 4:50 PM

Glad you liked it ,Mike.

Anne-Lise Andresen

July 3, 2018 at 8:07 AM

- I do not dare ... to swim with sharks - A great Senryu, Warren :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Warren Doll

July 3, 2018 at 11:42 AM

Me either. I'm glad you liked it Anne-Lise. Sending a big hug your way. Warren:)

Lyric Man

July 3, 2018 at 7:15 AM

It was going so beautifully until that last line ;)

Warren Doll

July 3, 2018 at 7:33 AM

Thank you for your visit and comment, Lyric Man. //Warren.

Tom Cunningham

July 2, 2018 at 10:07 PM

They are awesome creature's indeed, we enter their domain at our own risk.Warm weather seems to bring them in closer to our shores and of course people head for the beach when its warm, a bad combination for sure. Tom

Warren Doll

July 3, 2018 at 7:30 AM

Great comment, Tom. Thank you for your visit. // Warren