John Gondolf Poet Rhyme

Sweet Surrender

In low cut shirts and mini-skirts
she pesters passions through the day,
but my advances she averts
while still continuing her flirts,
she leaves me longing love’s ballet.

But daylight wanes and fades to night,
the thoughts of lustful love turn tender,
and with the bedroom drapes drawn tight
she wryly winks and lowers light,
and gives herself in sweet surrender.


April 8, 2018
Contest: Rhyme Time 2
Sponsor: Laura Loo

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Eve Roper April 25, 2018 at 9:35 PM Congratulations on your win, John, wonderful poem ..Hugs Eve ~`* John Gondolf April 26, 2018 at 4:43 AM Thank you, Eve, I appreciate it. John

James Inman April 25, 2018 at 7:37 AM Playful and tender John. John Gondolf April 25, 2018 at 8:21 AM Thanks for your comments, James, I appreciate it. John

Line Gauthier April 24, 2018 at 8:49 PM Sweet surrender indeed. Congrats on your most deserving win, John. John Gondolf April 24, 2018 at 9:21 PM Thanks, Line, I appreciate it. John

Susan Gentry April 24, 2018 at 5:34 PM Back to congratulate! Well done. John Gondolf April 24, 2018 at 6:08 PM Thanks so much, Susan, I appreciate it. John

Beautiful Scars April 24, 2018 at 8:55 AM just like Andrea said, lady of the night, great poem dear John...congratulations and thank you ;) -luloo John Gondolf April 24, 2018 at 10:14 AM Thank you, Luloo, I appreciate you, and thanks for hosting the contest.

Andrea Dietrich April 17, 2018 at 1:12 AM ahhh then she is only a lady of the night. Too preoccupied in daytime, as many of us are. Very nice one, John! John Gondolf April 17, 2018 at 5:25 AM And some just prefer the darkness of night. Thanks, Andrea, I appreciate it. John

Susan Gentry April 14, 2018 at 4:44 PM Good luck in the contest. A sensual description of sweet surrender, romantic and intriguing. Reads easy. John Gondolf April 15, 2018 at 7:34 AM Thank you, Susan, I appreciate it.

Laura Leiser April 9, 2018 at 11:56 PM Love this witty and entertaining poem, John! I enjoyed it. :) John Gondolf April 10, 2018 at 5:24 AM Thanks so much, Laura, I'm glad you enjoyed it. John

Nette Onclaud April 9, 2018 at 11:09 AM there goes the tender side of a woman, her vulnerabity... so well crafted, john.. huggs John Gondolf April 9, 2018 at 1:14 PM Thanks so much for your comments, Nette, this tender and vulnerable woman is in total control... John

Ilene Bauer April 8, 2018 at 3:56 PM this is wonderful, john! you have such a powerful command of rhythm and rhyme that i always read your poems more than once to savor that poetic flow... John Gondolf April 8, 2018 at 6:07 PM Ilene, thanks so much for your comments, the last few months I have worked on my meter and to have someone notice means a lot, thank you. John

Anne-Lise Andresen April 8, 2018 at 3:20 PM - Great publication with a high volume of divine romance, John :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) John Gondolf April 8, 2018 at 5:54 PM Thank you, Anne-Lise, I appreciate it. John

Susan Ashley April 8, 2018 at 12:53 PM Wow! Talk about hot and sensual, John, your impassioned poetic lines are smokin'! 'she pesters passions through the day' - so much allure, keeping you on the edge till your last sensational line. A very seductive and steamy write, my friend! Love it! John Gondolf April 8, 2018 at 5:11 PM Thank you, Susan, I am glad you enjoyed it. John

Alexis Y. April 8, 2018 at 11:24 AM Hi John, What a sweet and passionate tale you have penned. I thought the girl in the story was playing to hard to get however the last stanza shows she liked him too. Well done. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis John Gondolf April 8, 2018 at 12:07 PM Thanks for your comments, Alexis, some people just prefer to wait until dark, perhaps hiding in the shadows... John

CayCay Godwin April 8, 2018 at 11:22 AM You can get down to it when you wanna, you just pretend to be a mild-mannered CPA to hide your other identity. Oh, I'm getting carried away, teasing, but serious about Mr. Romance Passion coming out in poems when he's in the mood. This was seductive in delivery and content as handled by a sensual pen. I'm awake now. Hugs ... CayCay John Gondolf April 8, 2018 at 11:31 AM While I am a CPA I never said I was mild-mannered ;) Thanks for your support, CayCay, I always enjoy your comments. Glad I was able to wake you up this morning. John