Swans Lake Sate

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Written - 16th September 2023

Swans so gracefully gliding o'er lake Delightful scenery they create Dressed all in white feather finery True beauties of the lake dynasty. Falling in love with love forever Swan mates dance on water together Singing a swan lake song as they roam The glorious lake they've made their home. When swans in love kiss with a beak peck A heart shape appears betwixt their necks A smaller vision between the eyes Romanticism in lake's paradise. Swans raise their precious baby cygnets Till they've grown to become strong and fit Off to their own world they glide away The circle of life in a relay. Elegant they live, with poise they die On angelic wings away they fly Then when they've entered through heaven's gate Swans will sage nirvana with lake sate.

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Jeanette Brewin

Date: 11/15/2023 12:47:00 AM

A beautiful description of the swans. Such a lovely poem. Well written.

Jeanette Brewin
Date: 11/16/2023 12:42:00 AM

Hope you have a good day. Look at to reading more of your poems.

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 11/15/2023 3:19:00 AM

Thank you so much Jeanette, that’s music to my heart. Blessings, Belle

Ink Empress

Date: 9/17/2023 3:13:00 AM

How beautiful is this write! Just magical and dreamy, made me dream away and see this scene where swan mates dance on water and a heart shape appears, how romantic and passionate is this creatively crafted write: i also love the alliterations, and the way you’ve phrased your words and delivered imagery is so fairytale like! One of my faves definitely! Absolutely stunning and soul warming: goodluck for the contest

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 9/26/2023 7:39:00 PM

Sorry I missed this Ink, thank you for the wonderful review I truly appreciate every word … Belle

Panagiota Romios

Date: 9/16/2023 8:18:00 AM

Best wishes in the contest. It is so you, Belle, Beautifully buoyant)))) Pangie xx

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 9/16/2023 8:48:00 AM

Thank you Pangie, I so appreciate that. Belle xx

Hiya Sharma

Date: 9/16/2023 5:12:00 AM

Oh my, this is such a beautiful 'swan-world' you've illustrated with the magic of your eloquent words here.. I'm swirling in the spellbinding and whimsical aura of your resplendent rhymes and the gorgeousness of every line.. "When swans in love kiss with a beak peck, A heart shape appears between their necks" I absolutely love how you've described that, so profound and breathtaking! Truly enjoyed reading this, sending love- :)

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 9/16/2023 6:33:00 AM

Hi Hiya, to say I’m delighted with your awesome review would be an understatement, I’m on cloud nine. Thank you so much, sending love back in return -:) Belle

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 9/16/2023 4:38:00 AM

I love your rhyme scheme and how it effectively (with imagery) describes swans and love in general. A truly romantic poem describing enduring, unconditional love. Perfect. A fav!

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 9/16/2023 6:20:00 AM

Sara, thank you so very much for your wonderful comments and the fave, I’m more than delighted, I’m over the moon… Belle