Surrendered Love

caress me with soft love
and a lullaby it would sing a starry night
up above

fierce flame will burn
harmony of passion will light
unworn

breath kiss
by candle light
bliss

fleeting glance awakes Love
bathing in afterglow moon's light
bliss

3/5/2021

Minichu form by: Mohan Chutani
to late for the contest


 

1. This is a New form of Rhyme named MlNICHU (proposed by Mohan Chutani)
2. Total12 lines (4 stanzas of 3 lines each)
3. Rhyme scheme: Aba, cBc, dbD, ABD. 
4. 4th stanza consists of repeat of 1st line of  stanza1, 2nd line of stanza 2, and 3rd line of stanza 3.
Poem should stick to a chosen theme through all stanzas. A twist can be introduced in third stanza, if required by the theme, to make it more interesting.
5. Syllable count : 
Stanza 1: 6,12,3 (3 times 2,4,1)
Stanza 2: 4,8,2 ( 2 times 2,4,1)
Stanza 3: 2,4,1
Stanza 4: 6,8,1.
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Chutani Avatar
April 3, 2021 at 6:55 AM
Eve, a lovely perfect Minichu. How tender feelings can be expressed in a strict regimen, we must learn from you. Hope all well. next time, hoping to see your entry in my contest. Best wishes. Mohan
Ray Choudhury Avatar
March 8, 2021 at 5:25 PM
Wow! You have worked so hard on this beautiful love-poem, and you didn't have a chance to enter it!!! The rhyme-scheme sounds challenging - you have successfully incorporated it in a lovely romantic poem. Love ~ Mala
Proxenos Avatar
March 5, 2021 at 11:43 AM
Kudos for writing a wonderful romantic poem with a style that looks very complicated. Hugs and love Jennifer.
Mcintosh Avatar
March 5, 2021 at 6:28 AM
Lovely and lively.. exciting. Enchanting. Enlightening. love it. Love, Gina
Andresen Avatar
March 5, 2021 at 2:46 AM
- So sad you did not make it to the contest ... it would be a winning poem ... lovely written, Eve :) - Have a wonderful day :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Buhagiar Avatar
March 5, 2021 at 2:17 AM
A lovely romantic lullaby. Best for a win.
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