Sun Follows the Moon

There it is again
sun peeping behind the clouds
made for perfection

the crimson rays fade
falling down to horizon
darkness defeats light

colors of twilight
silence in the green meadows
moon enslaves the sun
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Agustin Avatar
December 17, 2024 at 7:26 AM
Thanks for sharing this... exposing your thoughts through your unique poetic style. Meanwhile, I greet you with the love of the Lord, expressed by John 3:16 of the Bible, "For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in him should not perish, but have everlasting life." Be blessed.
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March 23, 2016 at 12:23 PM
Eldaine, Enjoyed the way you expressed every line. Please keep writing and sharing your poetry. LOVE LINDA
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January 16, 2016 at 4:16 PM
Eldaine, enjoyed reading the words you poured on your poem. Have a wonderful day. **SKAT **
Tsiluma Avatar
October 29, 2012 at 5:21 AM
Lovely Haikus Eldaine! You've painted the scenery so well. Good work!
Mcadams Avatar
October 19, 2012 at 11:48 PM
Wonderful use of of haiku! Great imagery and flow! Welcome to the Soup and keep up the great work!
Brown Avatar
October 19, 2012 at 5:35 AM
A warm welcome to PoetrySoup I offer you Eldaine. I wish for you the best in your writing endeavors whatever they may be. Hoping you find even more inspiration by reading some of the poetry written here by other poets. Thank you for sharing your writing with us. Love, Carol
Andresen Avatar
October 19, 2012 at 1:13 AM
First I want to welcome you to the P-Soup. - Hope you'll have great pleasure to share your poems here with us. - I like your Haiku very well. - There are many here who are "experts" on Haiku - (I'm not) - I've written a few Haiku. - And that's my way of writing them. - I write what I think and feel here and now - that's my way. :) You are welcome to read my poems. Have a nice day. oxox love Anne-Lise :)
Lee Avatar
October 19, 2012 at 12:24 AM
honestly, this is the first haiku i ever made and i learned it since yesterday. I need you comments, corrections, advice, etc. Don't worry, I'm an open minded person. Thanks in advance.
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