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Sun Dancing

In the blush of sunlight, our flames become
a lacquered glow of orb we grasp its shine
to frolic in morn's bliss, hands coil as one.
In the blush of sunlight, our flames become
like promenading rays on winds that hum
until twin shadows glide a dance divine.
In the blush of sunlight, our flames become
a lacquered glow of orb we grasp its shine!



One in Five: For Beauty Strive Contest
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Skat A

February 11, 2014 at 7:05 PM

nice win. ~ Love ~ SKAT

Sara Kendrick

January 19, 2014 at 3:07 PM

This is awesome work!! No wonder it is in the winners’ list..Sara

Mustapha Mohammed

January 14, 2014 at 12:39 AM

Absolutely beautiful dear Nette.

Debbie Guzzi

January 12, 2014 at 6:11 PM

Great use of the form & the internal verse is pleasant also. Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Donna Jones

January 12, 2014 at 4:11 PM

Oh nette....how lovely is this and I now see the hidden phrase..so wonderful...congratulations..

Roger Horsch

January 12, 2014 at 11:32 AM

I got to enjoy reading this again. Congrats on your win.

Richard Lamoureux

January 12, 2014 at 10:33 AM

I love the poem and the poem within the poem. Congratulations.

Dr.Ram Mehta

January 12, 2014 at 12:48 AM

Beautiful write on the theme and congrats on the win, nette

Andrea Dietrich

January 11, 2014 at 9:31 PM

Hey, Nette, this was beautiful as ever. Just wish you'd put a few commas maybe to separate the phrases in a few places. Other than that, it was flawless! Congrats for your win.

Sandra Adams

January 1, 2014 at 9:26 PM

I adore the sunrises and sunsets, so this title drew me in... this is every bit as gorgeous as the most beautiful of sunsets Nette,,, very wonderfully crafted Triolet! Hugs

Mustapha Mohammed

January 1, 2014 at 10:14 AM

Beautifully woven write Nette. Impressive descriptive energy.

Kash Poet

December 31, 2013 at 12:57 PM

Beautiful Nette!Happy New Year to you!

Harry Horsman

December 31, 2013 at 9:23 AM

you sure are an amazing poet nette,,this is in blush of grace, that upon which you are having bared your soul here on soup,, to enchant us all/// happy new year to you...

James Peranteau

December 30, 2013 at 5:01 PM

The true sense of two souls engrossed with passion ! Lovely write dear poet ! Have a blessed New Year Nette ! Much Love,james

Anne-Lise Andresen

December 30, 2013 at 11:08 AM

- Nette my friend ..... you always write from your soul .... always sharing your beautiful thoughts and words .... Always give consideration and a huggs ... - Beautifully written! - Wish you all the best - Want to thank you for a lovely friendship and a enjoyable year, as soon be at an end .... many beautiful poems from you! - I wish you: A HAPPY NEW YEAR!! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Roger Horsch

December 30, 2013 at 9:41 AM

Such a wonderful poem Nette, I really liked this one...Hugs...Roger

Dr.Ram Mehta

December 30, 2013 at 8:22 AM

Enjoyed this beauty of a poem, nette

Debra Squyres

December 30, 2013 at 7:08 AM

Love that time of day when the sun seems to blush in beautiful colors... this is a beautiful dance of love to me... superb writing !!

Sara Kendrick

December 30, 2013 at 5:41 AM

Very passionate work..Enjoyed reading this one today..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Len Gasun

December 30, 2013 at 12:52 AM

You wrote a splendid poem my very dear friend Nette! I love your poem so much. Sunshine is my favorite & I'm also thinking of trying this form w/ the same topic. Hope I can do it soon. My short vacation has finally started. By the way, are you still in Hongkong dearest friend? Hope you enjoyed your trip there! Biggest hugs to u! take care! TYSM for stopping by at my Christmas Greetings Blog. If you've time, pls. read my reply. TYSM for everything! Happy New Year 2014! love lots & hugs, Leonora

Manny Paras

December 30, 2013 at 12:51 AM

Got the style, got the rhythm. This sways from gentle to bouncing beats. Rare gift you have!

Russell Sivey

December 29, 2013 at 11:51 PM

You have painted a very illustrious and beautiful vision with this awesome write here my friend! I really enjoyed reading this tremendous poem this evening! What a fantastic piece, such a fascinating poem Nette! You have mastered many forms, and this one is so very perfectly written, Great Work!! I want to wish you a very Happy New Year, may 2014 be everything you want it to be!!