David Kavanagh Poet Rhyme

Subsidence

Sloping hills roll nearby     
Sliding scree, drops awry    
Slanted rock face bone dry   
Slipping boulders, sweep by \\•,,,
Shelves break off splinters fly \\\\\••,,,
Sprawling dust blocks blue sky \\\\\\\\•••,,,,
Skewed landscape forms hereby\\\\\\\\\\\••••,,,


Written April 22 2021
for "Pleiades "S" Contest"
sponsored by Kim Merryman
Syllable counter PS 7x6

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Kim Merryman April 25, 2021 at 2:27 PM I hate to admit this, David, but I had to look "Subsidence" up in the dictionary. Creative choice, well defined and it rhymes! I don't think they are supposed to but I don't have a problem with it. Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim M David Kavanagh April 25, 2021 at 2:51 PM Heya Kim, I honestly wasn’t sure weather a Pleiades could rhyme or not, so I just kept the continuity going as the poem went into collapse , I’m delighted with your placement, subsidence is probably a word you never want to here, when talking about your house, or a hill nearby, cheers David

Gershon Wolf April 24, 2021 at 7:45 PM Love the way you're rhymed this, David. It sure works well for me. Here's to your win in the contest! Happiness and Joy, Gershon David Kavanagh April 24, 2021 at 9:15 PM Heya Gershon, it was a first go at the Pleiades form, wasn’t sure if rhyming was allowed, but I seem to have got away with it, always great to get a placement, thank you for popping in with congrats, cheers David

Sotto Poet April 22, 2021 at 2:13 PM I found the description fascinating and oddly original; there was a lot of iconic symbolism that would get my brain thinking of a slide. David, I wish you good luck in the contest, with my best regards. David Kavanagh April 22, 2021 at 2:22 PM Thank you Lasaad, if I can, and have some spare time I like to try add some originality, this is a 2 or 3 pronged approach, hopefully it works out, cheers David

Gary Radice April 22, 2021 at 1:52 PM The pleiades form is certainly new to me but from what I've read - both about the form and your poem David - you've certainly knocked it out of the ball park as far as I'm concerned. Cheers - Gary David Kavanagh April 22, 2021 at 2:00 PM Thanks Gary, it’s my first go at a Pleiades, hope I didn’t over cook it, took a while to figure this one out, and keep the correct syllable count, cheers David

L Milton Hankins April 22, 2021 at 1:51 PM Very interesting and unique presentation, David. I wish you the best in the contest. David Kavanagh April 22, 2021 at 2:02 PM Thanks Milton, I came at it sideways forgive the pun, was like putting a crazy puzzle together, cheers David

Jan Allison April 22, 2021 at 1:26 PM excellent imagery it made me think of a landslip on the beach and I love the rhyming:-) hugs jan xx David Kavanagh April 22, 2021 at 1:35 PM Heya Jan I seen pictures on tv, few weeks ago south coast of England, huge landslip into the sea, lucky nobody out walking, cheers David