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Stillbirth -Emotive Write

FICTIONAL POEM FOR CONTEST

I sailed through my pregnancy without a problem
We’d painted the nursery in pale blue
                          I was having
                            A little boy

I'd stroke my swollen belly every time he kicked 
we joked he'd be a great football player 
tragically he’d never kick a ball
no one knows why he stopped moving on my due date


        The doctors could not save my child
        Why was my baby born sleeping? 

                          My precious son
                            You never cried


F I C T I O N   P O E M  W R I T T E N F O R

n/a in Fragmented Verse Poetry Contest 
(n/a because the line spacing was incorrect for the form - now amended)




02/15/21

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Jennifer Proxenos February 23, 2021 at 12:37 PM Hi Jan, I'm so glad this was fiction, it is an excellent poem and I have to save it in my mind forever. I lost my first born at 5 days old, he was born a spina bifida and it was heartbreaking. God was kind though I fell pregnant 6 months later and 8 and a half months later I gave birth to a beautiful happy bouncy baby boy! Love and hugs, Jennifer. Jan Allison March 7, 2021 at 4:22 PM oh Jennifer that is so heartbreaking i am so sorry you had such sadness with your first born baby:-( hugs jan xx

Lindsay Laurie February 19, 2021 at 2:57 PM Hello Jan … your poem really hits hard Jan. How to cope with tragedy is hard to comprehend - thanks Jan - Lindsay Jan Allison February 19, 2021 at 3:54 PM Thanks Lindsay the pain must be so hard to live with for both husband and wife:-( hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen February 19, 2021 at 5:33 AM - The worst that can happen ... no one knows how much it hurts without having experienced it yourself ... heartbreaking poem, Jan - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison February 19, 2021 at 3:54 PM Thanks Anne-Lise, Happy weekend:-) hugs jan xx

David Kavanagh February 16, 2021 at 12:26 PM Fiction or not, is irrelevant Jan, only someone with total empathy and understanding could write such a verse, so in effect you have created reality, cheers David Jan Allison February 16, 2021 at 3:09 PM thanks for that comment David:-) hugs jan xx

Judy Ball February 16, 2021 at 7:41 AM Oh this is so sad and anyone who ever lost a baby feels it. It's why I get so mad every time someone says a fetus is not a baby until it's born. EXCUSE YOU. WHAT DO YOU THINK IT IS> Great job here my friend. God Bless, JB Jan Allison February 16, 2021 at 12:11 PM Thanks Judy, it is a very emotive subject:-( hugs jan xx

Rama Balasubramanian February 16, 2021 at 3:20 AM This is a tearjerker. You have captured the emotions beautifully. All the best for contest. Take care Rama Jan Allison February 16, 2021 at 12:11 PM Thanks Rama:-) hugs Jan xx

Victor Buhagiar February 15, 2021 at 11:07 PM My daughter had such a miscarriage. Happens often. Pity, ~~ Jan Allison February 16, 2021 at 12:10 PM Aww Victor that's so sad:-( hugs Jan xx

Caren Krutsinger February 15, 2021 at 9:13 PM Such a heartfelt poem sharing heartbreak of many. Jan Allison February 16, 2021 at 12:10 PM Thanks Caren:-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta February 15, 2021 at 7:39 PM My mother never "got over" her miscarriages, which were quite common years ago, but it is even worse when a small child dies, and that is increasingly common in the USA! Good luck in the contest! Aloha! Rico Jan Allison February 16, 2021 at 12:09 PM aww that's so sad Rico:-( hugs Jan xx

Janice Canerdy February 15, 2021 at 5:52 PM Very moving, Jan--the story of so many heartbroken women. Janice Jan Allison February 16, 2021 at 12:09 PM Thanks Janice I know from a friend's experience that it can affect relationships badly too:-( hugs Jan xx

Mystic Rose Rose February 15, 2021 at 3:42 PM Ah, no greater pain then to give birth to a still born child, You got my heart softening here. winning wishes Jan, hope your Valentine was good. xo Jan Allison February 16, 2021 at 12:06 PM Thanks Vie:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer February 15, 2021 at 2:31 PM i am so glad that this is fiction, jan, although you've made it sound very real. a touching and very sad poem... Jan Allison February 16, 2021 at 12:06 PM Thanks Ilene:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlotte Puddifoot February 15, 2021 at 1:55 PM this is a tearjerker jan, resonates with me as i lost my angel baby x Jan Allison February 16, 2021 at 12:05 PM aww Charlotte I'm so sorry you can relate its fiction for me but when I was training to be a nursery nurse the teacher had a stillborn baby and it's something I will never forget. hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham February 15, 2021 at 1:39 PM Such a sad scenario Jan, and because they've just given birth they are in the maternity ward with all the other mums with their newborns. In cases like that they should be given a room away from the maternity ward but its always down to money. Good luck in the contest. Tom Jan Allison February 15, 2021 at 1:49 PM I agree with you Tom especially if they know the baby has died, but sadly some babies don't always survive the birth so i guess that would be a tough call, so heartbreaking:-( hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. February 15, 2021 at 1:24 PM Hi Jan, It was hard to read this heartfelt write; it brought tears to my eyes. Although your well written write is fiction, it is true for many women worldwide. The second stanza was heartbreaking to read. Best wishes in the contest-Alexis Jan Allison February 15, 2021 at 1:47 PM Thanks Alexis when i did my nursery nursing training the pre school teacher had a stillbirth and it has always stayed with me:-( hugs jan xx