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still life
in the graveyard
ebon raven caws


09/19/20

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Laura Leiser

Date: 9/21/2020 7:09:00 PM

I can picture the chilly atmosphere in just a few well chosen words...great haiku, Jan! Enjoyed this :)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2020 12:24:00 AM

Thanks Laura and its good to see you back on soup:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/20/2020 11:18:00 AM

- A excellent haiku, Jan - It can be a vampire with raven claws - I think there must be a connection between body and soul ... if there is no soul, there is no one to "communicate with" ... but we do not have to find it at the cemetery - We'll probably find out ... when we are dead - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2020 11:23:00 AM

thanks for your detailed comment Anne-Lise:-) hugs jan xx

Jenna Logan

Date: 9/20/2020 7:44:00 AM

Glad to see this one as a winner, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2020 8:00:00 AM

Thanks Jenna, its a special poem to me in many ways:-) hugs jan xx

Mahtab Bangalee

Date: 9/20/2020 3:57:00 AM

expressive

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2020 7:19:00 AM

thanks so much Mahtab:-) hugs jan xx

John Watt

Date: 9/19/2020 11:25:00 PM

Please write more haiku, Jan. This one is touching and emotional. The ravens were a nice touch, and I love the photo you took. Very artistic. Congrats for your first place win, I celebrate with you, my friend.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2020 7:19:00 AM

Thanks John, I had never heard of haiku before i joined soup, am so pleased with the way this turned out, as you know it is a special piece to me for many reasons:-) hugs jan xx

Dexter Greener

Date: 9/19/2020 10:43:00 PM

Short Sweet and thought provoking...I like it

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2020 7:18:00 AM

Its the first non traditional haiku I have written, in this case less is definitely more:-) hugs jan xx

Hilo Poet

Date: 9/19/2020 5:58:00 PM

It's marvelous for me whenever poetic differences a standard "ebon", Jan, congrats on your 1st Place win, Aloha! William

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2020 7:17:00 AM

thanks William:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/19/2020 5:33:00 PM

wowsers, Jan. When did you do this one. Amazing work. FAVE, and congrats with Brian

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2020 7:15:00 AM

thanks Andrea, i had terribly sad news and for some reason i decided to visit the churchyard with my camera and this was the result. its the first non traditional haiku i have written and i am delighted it turned out so well:-) hugs jan xx

Mark Koplin

Date: 9/19/2020 4:50:00 PM

Peaceful and quiet, I want to be buried by a school yard where there is constant noise

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2020 7:14:00 AM

My ashes are to be scattered at a beauty spot - just hope hubby/ son choose a calm day lol:-) hugs jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 9/19/2020 1:34:00 PM

wonderful picture and poem, jan! so sorry to hear about your sad news...

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2020 7:13:00 AM

thanks Ilene it has shocked me to the core, she was only 33:-( perhaps i can go to the churchyard more often if it inspires me to write lol:-) hugs jan xx

Rico Leffanta

Date: 9/19/2020 11:46:00 AM

Ravens usually show your place, so don't be to eager for one to land on a tombstone! No rush, plenty of room for you so take your time! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2020 7:12:00 AM

thanks Rico:-) hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 9/19/2020 7:35:00 AM

Love your haiku Jan, they dont come any stiller than that. Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 9/19/2020 8:16:00 AM

exactly Tom i couldn't resist using that line with the picture - had tragic news on Thursday I am still coming to terms with it and finding it so difficult - i walked round the graveyard yesterday and this poem came to me - I was trying to get a pic with a crow on the grave but they were up in the trees:-) hugs Jan xx

Bobby May

Date: 9/19/2020 7:11:00 AM

JAN, is that a picture of your backyard how many husbands did you have? Great job Sis!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/19/2020 8:15:00 AM

lol, I'm on the lookout for my next victim I mean husband... how are you fixed lol:-) hugs jan xx

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 9/19/2020 6:59:00 AM

A wonderful write, dear Jan. God bless you with many more

Jan Allison
Date: 9/19/2020 8:14:00 AM

thanks Regina, love the new picture:-) hugs jan xx

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/19/2020 6:43:00 AM

Still is very adept description. Don't forget me though. I am not yet still :) ~~

Jan Allison
Date: 9/19/2020 7:53:00 AM

you are very much alive my friend and long may it continue so we can meet again:-) hugs jan xx

Jenna Logan

Date: 9/19/2020 6:32:00 AM

You just gave a whole new meaning to a "still life." Wonderful lines and your photo does them justice. The Poe-like mention of a raven extols the death. Very good concept, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/19/2020 7:50:00 AM

Hi Jenna I had tragic news on Thursday night it has truly knocked me for six she was only 33:-( took my camera with me when I visited mum and found peace as I wandered around the graveyard - the title still life reflected that life still goes on for those left to grieve:-( hugs jan xx

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