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mallards flying north closely in formation… bridesmaids in a row

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Line Gauthier

Date: 2/6/2021 7:52:00 PM

So glad to find this delightful poem published in the 2020 PS Anthology ~ charming imagery, David

David Mohn
Date: 2/7/2021 12:54:00 PM

thank you Line...I appreciate you checking it out :)

Janice Canerdy

Date: 6/22/2017 5:54:00 PM

Great haiku, David-Congrats on being one of the THREE winners! Janice

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/21/2017 2:32:00 PM

A lovely winning haiku David! Congratulations on your wonderful win! ; )

Eve Roper

Date: 6/21/2017 1:18:00 PM

very nice, congratulations on your win~*

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 6/21/2017 11:32:00 AM

I truly enjoyed the twist at the end here, David! It really gave me that "aha!" moment, and found your comparison unique and smile-inducing. Big congrats on your win in Chris' contest :D!

Jan Allison

Date: 6/21/2017 1:22:00 AM

I remember reading this one before - so lovely to see it on the winner's list. many congrats David:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/20/2017 11:47:00 PM

David, I consider you one of the best of the haiku writers at Soup. Congrats on your win with this gem.

Eve Roper

Date: 3/16/2015 4:14:00 PM

love the imagery a 7 congratulations on your win

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/13/2015 12:05:00 PM

Congrats on your top win, David! Very nicely done. Sandra

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/12/2015 9:45:00 PM

I am glad to see here that she accepts implied metaphors. I love when people use them in their haiku. This is wonderful. Congrats on your win.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/12/2015 7:32:00 PM

Thanks so much for the entry what you have done in line 3 is called an implied metaphor- it's very tricky to do & I didn't expect anyone to do it! I did not want anyone to use overt metaphor [ the tree looks like a lollipop] because that is subjective opinion - but what you have done is show us a bridal party in a scene with a formation of mallard ducks flying above & in the readers minds eye they DO picture both at the same time & note the similarity! HUZZAH

David Mohn
Date: 3/12/2015 9:30:00 PM

Both your gracious placement and your detailed analysis are much appreciated Debbie