Hello There Poet Rhyme

Spiraling Reflections

"If someone listens, or stretches out a hand, or whispers a word of encouragement, or attempts to understand a lonely person, 
extraordinary things begin to happen."
~Loretta Girzartis                                                
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reminiscing reasons 
ruminating rhyme 
pondering reality
recalling thoughts sublime

never-ending pain 
unremitting sorrow 
evoking one recurring theme 
a farewell to tomorrow

exhausted from the hunger
disabled by the thirst
consumed by each and every loss
will ‘better’ make things worse

thoughts embracing 'freedom' 
dissipating pain
awaiting the tranquility 
after so much rain
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"I have learned now that while those who speak about one's miseries 
usually hurt, those who keep silence hurt more."
~C. S. Lewis   
                                                            
"Burden" (Lyrics)

Let me carry your burden
If something’s not right I will let you know
Like the paint that’s drying on a heart that’s broke

Let me carry your burden
Get you back on a high when you’re feeling low
When the weight’s too heavy but you won’t let go

Come to me my brother and I will sit with you awhile
Pretty soon I’ll see you smile
And you know you will
No matter how much you're hurting right now
You know that everything will change in time
So let me carry your burden

Let me carry your burden
When your might’s on fire but your mind is cold
And you’re fanning flames that won’t keep you warm

Come to me my brother and I will sit with you awhile
Pretty soon I’ll see you smile
And you know you will
No matter how much you're hurting right now
You know that everything will change in time
Let me carry your burden, O brother mine

Let me carry your burden
Come tomorrow you’ll be right as rain
It’ll quench your fire
Wash away your stains

Come to me my brother and I will sit with you awhile
Pretty soon I’ll see you smile
And you know you will
No matter how much you're hurting right now
You know that everything will change in time

Oh I just might see it in another light
Got no dog here in the fight
I could carry your burden
O brother mine

Songwriter: Foy Vance

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Winged Warrior October 29, 2019 at 5:41 PM Lovely written-lovely said HT...I agree with Loretta Girzartis 110%...we are our brother's keeper...miracles do happen out of love...a fav my friend...^WW^ :o) Hello There October 29, 2019 at 7:59 PM Wow, ^WW^ ~ thank you so much for the honor. Funny, I didn't think these words would be found satisfactory to many readers. I'm a little dumbfounded, but appreciative... Winged Warrior October 29, 2019 at 5:42 PM great song choice too...:o)

Gershon Wolf October 29, 2019 at 11:41 AM Timely message, so lyrically penned, H.T! As they say in Yiddish (translated to English here): If you've got problems, tell someone!! Cheers, Gershon Hello There October 29, 2019 at 7:55 PM Telling someone usually does help lighten the load a bit... Thank you, Gershon.

Ts Poetry October 29, 2019 at 7:19 AM We can take the pain, but let it be a reminder for all that suffer worse than us. Love Foy Vance Hello There October 29, 2019 at 7:52 PM I'm not sure if taking the pain is the best way, though I have chosen it most often. I hope others will choose to reach out. Glad you like the music ;)

Swetha Vangaveti October 29, 2019 at 6:50 AM An insightful poem!! An instant fave to me :) Hello There October 29, 2019 at 7:46 PM Wow, Swetha, that is incredible. I am very grateful :)

Judy Ball October 29, 2019 at 5:48 AM Excellent my friend. Very insightful. A good read with an even better message. Bravo. God Bless, JB Hello There October 29, 2019 at 7:46 PM Thank you so much, Judy ~ hugs.

Chris Green October 28, 2019 at 7:17 AM What a fantastic collection of art I have found here. The poem is amazing, like usual. The songs fits perfectly the thoughts expressed here as do the quotes. Those who keep it all in, suffer alone. I have been guilty of this as well. Not to want to burden another with my problems. Really cool my friend. Hello There October 28, 2019 at 9:16 AM Thank you so much, Chris, for your thorough and uplifting review and share. To lessen the weight of another's burden often requires very little. I know you would be first in line for many if you could. Trust there are others who would do the same for you...

Andrea Dietrich October 27, 2019 at 12:12 PM Wonderful poem! I also enjoyed that quote. I blab about my misery to everyone, which must be annoying to them. But maybe this means I hurt less!! I don't think anyone can carry our burdens of physical problems, but I'd pay good money to find a way to unburden myself of them! Obviously this speaks of emotional pain. I am happily free of that. YOur poem is a very good one for those with such struggles. Hello There October 27, 2019 at 2:50 PM Thank you so much, Andrea for your generous insight. I think you are right. Physical hurt can cause emotional pain, in the end, and vice versa, but being able to speak about either or trusting enough to lean on another can help relieve some of the burden, I think.

Silent One October 27, 2019 at 4:17 AM foy Vance is a great singer... this is a deep write from your pen, the thing is we carry many a burden of others, and it weighs us down... at the end it comes down to a balance of holding on or letting go.. Hello There October 27, 2019 at 2:41 PM Yeah, I'm finding the perfect mood in his songs to match some of my pieces. I definitely agree with you, SO. It is important not to literally 'carry' the burden of another, but providing an ear, a shoulder, a smile, a prayer, if and when you have the strength yourself...goes a long way, I think.

Quoth Theraven October 26, 2019 at 4:29 PM Hello Hello, Intriguing write..'exhausted from the hunger..disabled by the thirst'. Your song choice really sets the tone and mood well. -Richard Hello There October 26, 2019 at 9:19 PM Thank you so very much, Richard :) I'm thrilled you included feedback on the song as well ~ I used the same artist for the sestina posted just prior to this, if you care to check it out ;)

Vijay Pandit October 26, 2019 at 8:47 AM Meaningful reflections on burdens of life..you gave them a voice, HT. Hello There October 26, 2019 at 12:35 PM Thank you so much, Vijay. That is all I wanted to do... <3

Sandra Adams October 26, 2019 at 7:39 AM i like how you set this one up....i think the saddest often pretend to be happy when inside they are dying...because they don't want the pain to show...but sometimes when on the verge of tears they will not speak because they don't want others to see...good write.... hugs Hello There October 26, 2019 at 12:34 PM Thank you so much, my friend. I agree... hugs

Heidi Sands October 26, 2019 at 7:13 AM Great one HT. Well done :) Hello There October 26, 2019 at 12:33 PM Thank you, Heidi ~ I wasn't really sure how these simple words might be received. I appreciate your feedback :)

Arturo Michael October 26, 2019 at 5:06 AM I like how you did this poem... Hello There October 26, 2019 at 12:31 PM Thank you so much, Arturo ~ I really appreciate it :)

Brenda Chiri October 26, 2019 at 3:35 AM Wow this was truly amazing! I simply loved it!;) great work!;) Brenda Chiri October 28, 2019 at 12:26 AM It's always nice to give our thoughts a home! And really if they can be appreciated like they are here!;) Hello There October 26, 2019 at 12:31 PM Thank you, Brenda! A few transparent thoughts that had been lingering about without a home for quite some time. Thought I'd place them here :)