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Spices Bouquet

Rumbles roar Waterfall's bellows pitch Misty spray sprinkles rocks quinces thirst Soft moist moss Springs forth upon hard rock Constant moisture encourages growth Yell water Rush, reverberate Crash, clamor upon solid firm stone Fresh clean air Scented with spring flowers Crisp lavender spices' bouquet untouched Sponsor: Nette Onclaud Contest:Forms Of Crystalline Theme: Waterfalls Written by: Sara Kendrick Today, October 31, 2014

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Paul Callus

Date: 11/1/2014 7:55:00 AM

Ohhh from the title I had not realized this was for the waterfall contest! Yours, too, is uniquely tackled. The way it flows, it sort of reminds me of Olive_eloi's style of writing. gl in the contest. // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/31/2014 8:47:00 PM

I agree with Jan here. You have some lovely alliteration in this one. I suggest you use the syllable counter she provided. Moist I believe has only one syllable. I ought to use it to recheck MY poem for her as well!! Oh and I loved your mention of lavender.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/31/2014 8:46:00 PM

Sara, the poem you commented on of mine today did not have to be precise meter, I just enjoy writing that way. So you should try that contest. he does prefer rhyme though. Let me see this one now!!