Jessica Arteaga Poet Haiku

Spell Cast

While you lay awake,
what whispers of sensation,
are left on your skin?

The feel of silence,
has filled you with such loud thoughts,
of this person here;

she has slept enough
for you to absorb and smell.
The spell she has cast,

left you hypnotized.
You wish this witch, won't take flight,
delicious her might.

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Hyle Chu August 12, 2009 at 10:51 PM Great lines: "The feel of silence, / has filled you with such loud thoughts, / of this person here;" There is a lot of confusion about Haiku and Senryus and how they should be written. However, those lines I mentioned above are just too good. Mail me if you want to discuss Haikus.

John Loving Iii August 12, 2009 at 6:09 PM spellbinding poem. good. john h loving iii

James Knox August 12, 2009 at 3:18 PM im spellbound ... great poem, thank you for your warm comments, i definately appreciate them :)

Carolyn Devonshire August 12, 2009 at 2:46 PM Bewitching, Jessica! You certainly cast your spell with this one. "Loud thoughts" is an excellent oxymoron. Very sensual! Love, Carolyn

Sara Kendrick August 12, 2009 at 2:45 PM Interesting writing. Sara