Sparrow

Upon my fence alit a pretty sparrow
Her stay was brief, and yet I felt more noble
Than if the visit were of king or pharaoh


(inspired by writings of Henry David Thoreau)

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Robertina B.

Date: 2/4/2020 10:35:00 AM

A belated congratulations on your win, John.. A splendid write!! Short and sweet with wonderful imagery.. Have a blessed day!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/14/2020 6:19:00 PM

This was one of my favorites from the get go. Congrats on your win, John, and also you have become such a wonderful friend!

John Watt
Date: 1/14/2020 7:42:00 PM

Thank you friend, for your frequent encouragement. Glad to know this little sparrow brought a smile ~ J

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/14/2020 2:06:00 PM

- Congratulations so much on your winning poem :) - // Anne-Lise

John Watt
Date: 1/14/2020 6:51:00 PM

Thank you Anne-Lise! Always appreciate your uplifting words.

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 1/14/2020 2:26:00 AM

Nicely done - such meaning and content in three lines ... the wonder of poetry is oft' times how few words are required. Beauty in simplicity, which takes extensive knowledge of vocabulary - the more words we KNOW, the fewer we have to use ... I think many people think otherwise, that the more vocab you learn, the more your poetry should be jammed full of "eloquence". It is quite the contrary, don't you think? Love this one, John! :o)

John Watt
Date: 1/14/2020 6:55:00 PM

Gregory, vocabulary and economy are two areas I've been trying to work on (I seem to be wired to wax verbose!) I learn much from my fellow writers on Soup and in reading the classics. So kind of you to stop by and give such an uplifting comment - thank you! John

Jenish Somadas

Date: 1/12/2020 11:10:00 AM

Wow..An amazing three liner..Great win..Congrats..

John Watt
Date: 1/12/2020 10:50:00 PM

Thank you kindly Jenish. I like your avatar, poet! ~ John

Silent One

Date: 1/12/2020 7:28:00 AM

Great imagery.. Congrats on your placement in the contest..

John Watt
Date: 1/12/2020 10:52:00 PM

SO, thank you for sponsoring yet another contest and for stretching the boundaries of the Soup poets with challenges to write different types of poetry. Thank you kindly for the placement. Blessings ~ John

Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/9/2020 6:28:00 PM

Just love your classy style and cadence. Here's to a little nobility amidst the noise of the raging, ragged mobs today! Thanks, John! G. L. in the contest. Cheers, Gershon

John Watt
Date: 1/12/2020 10:54:00 PM

Gershon, even your comments are poetic (the noise of the raging, ragged mobs)! You are appreciated ~ John

Gershon Wolf
Date: 1/12/2020 1:13:00 PM

Back with congrats on your richly deserved placement in the contest, John! Cheers, Gershon

John Watt
Date: 1/10/2020 12:41:00 AM

Gershon, thank you again for another thoughtful and encouraging comment. Have a wonderful day ~ John

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/7/2020 3:44:00 PM

wow, this is really good!!! One of the best I have seen so far for this contest. Certainly better than mine. I could only think to write about the usual same o same o in my life!!

John Watt
Date: 1/10/2020 12:43:00 AM

Thank you Andrea, you are beyond kind. Hugs ~ John

Wendy Watson

Date: 1/7/2020 2:07:00 PM

Beautiful sentiments expressed here, John. I've not seen the use of lit in this context but presume that you're using it to mean alighted?

John Watt
Date: 1/7/2020 7:47:00 PM

Wendy, thank you not only for your kind words, but for your observation. I looked online and I believe I've been incorrectly using the word 'lit' instead of 'alit' (which is a valid substitution for 'alighted': https://www.dictionary.com/browse/alight Fortunately, I was able to make the edit without affecting the syllable count. I sincerely appreciate you correcting my mistake! ~ John