Spanish Ancestral Building

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5.18am Oct. 12, 2024

Midnight of October thirty first I jumped out of bed to quench my thirst As I groped my way down the huge kitchen An eerie coldness crept on my skin and then... When I fumbled the light’s switch on the wall I was frozen to hear deep whispering calls Echoing laughter followed my repeated name I couldn’t move back, I felt completely lame. I tried to turn on my mini-flashlight But I’ve felt numbness as I gripped it tight Darkness was a vast monster devouring me But I tried to compose myself so I won’t pee. White figures of entrants slowly passed by I couldn’t believe, I tried to rub my eye They were in pairs while holding hands Looked as if they were all going to dance. White glowing shapes of women in gowns Infront of men as white smoke blurred around Spanish waltz played in haunting sound When a man’s figure came, seemed I lost pounds. The man was wearing formal suit in white In front of me, His skull smiled so bright I lost control and dropped on the floor in fright And I slept in the kitchen that spooky midnight. My landlady woke me up in the morning With boarding mates all laughing I told them of the ghosts in our boarding school Everyone believed my story, that was so cool.

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Susan Ashley

Date: 10/14/2024 5:55:00 PM

Dearest Len, my inspiring poet friend, I was captivated by your spooky rhymes and haunted verses. Vivid ghostly imagery and terrified reactions evoke a hair-raising scene. Your creative pen shines in this fearsome piece. Warmest wishes my sweet friend.. ~Susan

Len Gasun
Date: 10/14/2024 6:00:00 PM

Thank you so much for stopping by to read my spooky rhyme my dearest poet friend Susan and your uplifting words too. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs

Maria Williams

Date: 10/14/2024 3:13:00 AM

Scary indeed len - but I loved it. Trust it wasn't too cold spending the night on the kitchen floor. lol - I guess you better not go to my Halloween Night video - it's scary too. Lol -Maria

Len Gasun
Date: 10/14/2024 5:56:00 AM

Thank you for reading my poem my dear poet friend. I'm glad you love it although it was fiction. The reality in that building was the presence of ghosts working on typewriters and dragging their chained feet. We only heard once and my school mates and I hid in our blankets.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 10/14/2024 2:58:00 AM

Sounds like you are very visual with a fertile mind lol, I love this its so creative and good !

Len Gasun
Date: 10/14/2024 5:48:00 AM

Thank you my dear poet friend MRose for reading my poem and your uplifting comments. I just really wrote a fiction out of this Spanish Ancestral Building where I stayed before. Ghost here worked on typwriters and dragged their heavy chained feet.

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 10/14/2024 1:31:00 AM

Spooky, my cousin's house was haunted by something. Thanks for visiting my poems xxx

Len Gasun
Date: 10/14/2024 1:35:00 AM

You don't know how happy I am to read from you my dear poet friend Mandy. So happy for your visit on my page too. Best wishes always especially in all your writing endeavors. Sending lots of love and hugs

Tom Woody

Date: 10/11/2024 4:45:00 PM

Well, as long as you didn't wet your pants it's all good Len

Len Gasun
Date: 10/13/2024 11:31:00 PM

Yes, and I was so grateful dear poet friend. So grateful for passing by too and reading my humble poem. Blessings to you. Hugs