Home » Poems » Silent One » Soul's Abode

Soul's Abode

charcoal clouds plunder unholy bullets of rain on window panes of pain forlorn flutes summon crows & ravens ebony eyes hunger to abduct a pomegranate ruby in motions of seeking deeper depths where words drown spirits mind spins to lose connection disconnected dwelling within the soul's abode whispers soft & pure direct towards a path of lanterns reflecting a starry night in each breath in each sigh like a flightless human sore spirit soars to realms unseen to worlds unknown silent esoteric echoes of mystic music willingly manipulate melancholy as mute melodies unlock gates of Serenity & sincerity embracing stillness silhouettes & shadows dissolve illuminating the temple of a human heart's soothed soul resembling a golden orb halo transcending in amber orange horizons free from confinement

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Paulette Calasibetta

Date: 3/15/2024 11:07:00 AM

Congratulations on your 1294 contest win. As always you find that place that is so soulful. Kudos, Paulette

Tonye George

Date: 3/13/2024 7:24:00 PM

I love how it explains what happens to someone in a flash of evocative metaphors. How we disconnect from the things we want to do or the dreams we plan to fulfil. But there's always a light to heal our broken spirits. Lovely written Silent.

Jude Herrick

Date: 3/13/2024 2:25:00 PM

I like the metaphors pomegranate ruby being a tearing at a heart. Bullets of rain on the pane of trauma. Till the north stars guide a change in mode, second wind carries its white horse with golden orb halo. Epic write, Silent One.

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 3/13/2024 11:27:00 AM

I will have to read this one again for I am not great with metaphors and this one is deep but well written. love phyl

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 3/12/2024 6:19:00 AM

The liberating power of silence! So artistically penned! Superb use of metaphors and alliteration creating a powerful symphonic effect

Vijay Pandit

Date: 3/12/2024 5:16:00 AM

Fabulous descriptions throughout my friend.--forlorn flutes summon crows & ravens ebony eyes hunger to abduct a pomegranate ruby--beauty!

Sotto Poet

Date: 3/11/2024 7:15:00 PM

Your poem, Silent One, is a truly remarkable piece of work. I was particularly impressed by the structure and flow of your alliterative lines, which exuded a soft and soulful quality. The imagery of embracing stillness and the dissolution of silhouettes and shadows was particularly powerful, showcasing the profound impact of tranquility.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 3/11/2024 6:24:00 PM

I so love this form and the way you build it up with such beauty, can you teach me how ?

Silent One
Date: 3/12/2024 12:49:00 PM

You do not need me to teach you... You were born a poet my friend.. close your eyes and reveal your heart..

Duke Beaufort

Date: 3/11/2024 5:50:00 PM

SO, this is a wonderful description of the human soul. My own thinking is we have reached a level where we can contemplate these things. You probably know what I think about souls, but I love the way you write about being human. Many yearn for transcendence.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 3/11/2024 5:38:00 PM

magnificent creation, Silent One. I liked the physical structure of your poem. Your alliterative lines flowed beautifully. Your poem was softly soulful.I especially liked these lines: embracing stillness silhouettes & shadows dissolve. How powerful stillness is! Have a splendid evening, Sara

Paige Hind

Date: 3/11/2024 3:50:00 PM

I'm glad you broke through the confinement. Very deep...

Eve Roper

Date: 3/11/2024 2:10:00 PM

Well created, stillness a part of the body creating wellness. Hugs my friends

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 3/11/2024 2:01:00 PM

towards a path of lanterns reflecting a starry night…perhaps Van Gogh reflections…stillness…silhouettes…shadows…love the golden orb and free from confinement…wrote a comment but accidentally erased it thinking it was an other poet’s page…sigh…Hugs ~ Kim

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/11/2024 1:46:00 PM

- Embracing the silence is good for the soul...let the spirits drown in this silence...fly - A deeply emotional poem my friend :) - hugs

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/11/2024 1:45:00 PM

Enjoyed reading this one today. Sometimes we have those days where it seems like everything is gray and there are raindrops hitting the panes matching our pain for sure. Those days we experience the golden orb to light our mood is wonderful. Thanks for sharing this emotive and expressive one with us. Sara K

Ink Empress

Date: 3/11/2024 1:00:00 PM

Wow this is beyond brilliant and so creative dear silent one, you amaze me with your alliterative skills and ability to pair words in a way that leaves me in awe inspired and captivated by the creative nature of your lines and how it creates a cadence effortlessly yet seamlessly. I love so many lines especially love how you mentioned pomegranate ruby and also the word pairings at the end really stood out for me” of lantern reflecting a starry night in each breath in each sigh love the imagery

Ink Empress
Date: 3/11/2024 1:02:00 PM

And flow there and also “ silent esoteric echoes “ clever and so unique! Your use of poetic techniques here truly is beautiful! “mystic music willingly manipulate melancholy as mute melodies unlock gates of Serenity & sincerity” love that! So soulfully divine! Just love everything about this! As always youv nailed it from your versatile quill! Pleasure reading this