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Soul Expansion

Stone winds are all in place
Filling entire surreal space
They are as if by divine grace
The mind they have in embrace

By stone winds number soul percolates through abyss
From there it continues to percolate until it reaches final bliss
Where by Goddess she is given a kiss
With cave of elements acting as to mouth of abyss epiglottis 

But what if this bizarre percolation 
Beyond imagination
Is just an element to next soul’s formation?
And this process continues until it finds per maximal dimension’s location

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Just That Archaic Poet

Date: 9/17/2013 11:41:00 AM

I like where you are headed with this piece, and I enjoyed the metaphor of "stone wind", but I think you overuse the verb "percolate". Your rhymes are also not as tight or succinct as they could be, and I think if you reworded it some, evened out the metre and prosody, you would have a stunning piece of poetry :)