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Something Stirring

As night descends, casting darkness all is silent and so very still waiting, listening, and breathless Into the dark of nights coldness do you feel it, that stone cold chill as night descends, casting darkness The cold seeping chilling denseness it seems to invade , to instill waiting, listening, and breathless Something stirring in the blackness the noises now loud and so shrill as night descends, casting darkness Death shows his face full of graveness in the dark stands waiting to kill waiting, listening and breathless Now life seeps away, its painless just a gasp then it flees noiseless as night descends, casting darkness waiting, listening and breathless

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Date: 9/26/2020 11:23:00 PM
Now life seeps away, its painless just a gasp then it flees noiseless as night descends, casting darkness waiting, listening and breathless....it's nice at last; I enjoyed this beautiful poem
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Date: 9/23/2020 4:05:00 PM
I could feel the cold, dense chill of the night with death coming near...a great use of the villanelle.
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Date: 5/29/2013 5:08:00 PM
You can almost feel the grip of death-waiting, watching . Nicely done on this poem. love phyl
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Shadow Hamilton
Date: 5/30/2013 4:25:00 AM
ty Phyllis suspense is a great tool lol ty for kind remarks Linda
Date: 5/29/2013 12:38:00 PM
Very nice! Terry
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Shadow Hamilton
Date: 5/29/2013 1:41:00 PM
hi Terry and ty happed you like it Linda
Date: 5/29/2013 8:17:00 AM
Gripping tone here! I like this! I enjoyed the consistent build-up. :)
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Shadow Hamilton
Date: 5/29/2013 10:15:00 AM
hi Drake ty dear I did my job then lol the build up so important glad you felt it Linda

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