Smoke

Smoke filled lungs Cloud the oxygen trying to get in Fat veins, dark hearts and burnt lungs Straining to take a breath Whilst you’re gripping at your chest It’s an aggravation, and annoyance Quitting is always harder than it seems.

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Matthew Romano

Date: 6/7/2011 12:49:00 PM

I bet there's so many people who can relate to this Emma. It's a really relevant piece of writing and I think the descriptions you use are perfect and so vivid. Matt xx

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 6/6/2011 3:04:00 PM

Creative and interesting expressions, Emma

Gemma Latham

Date: 6/6/2011 8:34:00 AM

i like the subject you have chosen here emma, its something that a lot of people face whilst trying to quit

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/5/2011 4:57:00 PM

Emma, not a pleasent feeling ,, I'm one to say thanks God I have bad lungs... I never picked up the sensation to be smokeing... My asthma as a child gave me lousy lungs... Great poem ,, take care,..p.d.