'smiling Faces'

They leer at your soul as you shrink into your role ~ withdrawn in your hole...

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Bobby May

Date: 10/17/2019 9:28:00 AM

I don't know Gershon my colleagues could be right but I was thinking of a gofer in a hole, lol excellent my friend and well done!!

Gershon Wolf
Date: 10/17/2019 10:24:00 AM

Hey, I was too, actually, Bobby, my man: My original version's last line was 'a bottomless hole.' So 'go-for it!.' ~ Wood Chuck

Chris Green

Date: 10/17/2019 7:56:00 AM

Had me singing "Smiling Face Sometimes" (they don't tell the truth)by the Temptations when I read the title. The poem speaks that so loudly. Nicely done my friend.

Gershon Wolf
Date: 10/17/2019 10:22:00 AM

Exactly(!) what I had in mind, my friend: Those 'smiling faces' --- beware! Smiles, Gershon

Elaine Perrin

Date: 10/17/2019 7:37:00 AM

So much power in so few words! Love it :-) x

Elaine Perrin
Date: 10/17/2019 2:32:00 PM

Lol ;-) x

Gershon Wolf
Date: 10/17/2019 10:22:00 AM

Condensing your comment, I see that this poem was 'so...so.' … LOL. Thank you so much for such an endorsement of this senryu, Elaine! :) gw

P.S. Awtry

Date: 10/16/2019 11:08:00 PM

I should have picked up on the quotation marks around the title... Like Mo, (below) I was surprised by the poem. That is a packed 3 lines! "shrink into your role"... wow. Dang this is a FAV for me.

Gershon Wolf
Date: 10/17/2019 10:20:00 AM

A FAVE! Dang! Smiles. Thank you so much for your encouragement, P.S. Warm wishes, Gershon

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 10/16/2019 9:16:00 PM

That was nothing at all what I was expecting. Powerful evocative little poem there. xomo

Gershon Wolf
Date: 10/17/2019 10:19:00 AM

Hey, thank you so much, M.M! As for expectations -- As my spiritual guru tells me, "Don't never have none, Wolfman!" LOL. Cheers, Gershon