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Smelly Old Man

smelly old man - -
passers by sniff
and check their shoes

my ears hurt 
and crystal shatters - -
she calms down

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/7/2011 12:05:00 AM

Jack, if it's old men...lol.. they need to check their fishing gear... ha ha! a good one.. enjoyed both,..p.d.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/28/2011 3:21:00 PM

really like that second one what a great juxtaposition! the 1st one stunk? LOL Light & Love

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 11/28/2011 10:44:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Charles' "Short Short Haiku" contest Jack. Love, Carol

Joseph Osita

Date: 11/26/2011 3:34:00 PM

Many congrats on your second place win in the contest. Have a nice day

David Williams

Date: 11/26/2011 12:02:00 PM

jack congrats on your super win..David

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 11/26/2011 11:08:00 AM

Oh shucks, can't help but feel for the smelly old man, Jack (have to admit when I read your title, it made me smile) and ouchy!! I hope nobody got hurt with those glass fragments ;) but oh, what a release to just throw that crystal!! Super congrats on your win, Jack & thanks for passing by my poems :)

Kash Poet

Date: 11/26/2011 7:58:00 AM

Very witty haiku here Jack!Congrats on your big win.My last Avatar was an actress from India.

Margaret Foster

Date: 11/26/2011 1:16:00 AM

Congratulations Jack. very strong scents and sounds. :) good job...Margaret

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/25/2011 11:38:00 PM

hahaha. These are quite funny for haiku. You are just great, Jack. Congrats on your win.

Kim Merryman

Date: 11/25/2011 8:12:00 PM

Congrats on your 2nd place win, Jack. Great haiku. Kim

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 11/25/2011 4:36:00 PM

A wonderful win for you, congrats and I especially loved the second one.

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 11/25/2011 3:15:00 PM

Well done, Jack.Congratulations on your well deserved win..

Black Eyed Susan

Date: 11/17/2011 10:27:00 AM

the first one is funny. i don't get the 2nd one and how it relates to the 1st. what am i missing? - feeling stupid on the east coast

Date: 11/16/2011 5:20:00 PM

Enjoyed your haiku's Jack, I thought both were funny and your comments on AC/DC " Back in Black " is still my fave to listen to. Love Alexa

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 11/16/2011 7:45:00 AM

more awesome words Jack.. great imagery on the shoes luv.. nice mental picture too.. phew.. good luck in contest.. sorry I think I lost your yahoo mail.. could u re send again.. my right hand is in a cast from finger surgery last week so hard to type.. Ron is helping me some..luv..oh..

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 11/15/2011 6:23:00 AM

Clear imagery in few words...haiku for sure, Jack! (...right Debbie?) (And thank you for being a community builder and for unselfishly sharing your time to read and encourage poetry on this site. My life took a swift new direction about 8 months ago, and I have not been able to reciprocate. My thanks go to every community builder who enjoys poetry and encourages other poets, like I once tried to do. I love you…all! Lovingly, Dane Ann)

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 11/14/2011 8:53:00 PM

Are these haiku Jack, if so both are great, I especially love the first one asit tickles my nose. If for a contest I hope you do well! :)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 11/14/2011 12:55:00 PM

What a difference between the two haiku, Jack. You had me laughing with the first one. The second seemed like a breakup was at hand until she "calmed down." Very creative entry for Charles' latest haiku contest. Wishing you success! Love, Carolyn

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