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I broke
my proper thumb
within venial borders
a shear from a bygone era

on your
tip of the iceberg
you spread a ruffle in my
bleeding shadows

we steer
the flow
on with the ebb and tideway
cutter with sawtoothed teeth
 
the scorn
of buoyant tethering
In a state of torpidity

5st PLACE CONTEST WINNER

Written: March 27, 2022

A BRIAN STRAND 1098 Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Brian Strand


THIS IS AN OPEN(organic) FORM VERSE without grammatical symbols the ' open' relies upon 'the one breath limitation' & so inherently requires the 'reader' (reciter) to input and respond thus making the form a two way interplay and often a unique interpretation by the enigma so derived. ( Poem inspired by Poet Brian Strand Form)

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Date: 3/30/2022 1:01:00 AM
Written in a very beautiful form. Congratulations!
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Date: 3/28/2022 7:23:00 AM
Wow, yes love the inventiveness, the flow and the form.
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Date: 3/28/2022 5:55:00 AM
A very interesting poem. It intrigued me.
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Date: 3/27/2022 9:26:00 AM
this is very profound and I love how it LOOKS. If it's for Brian's contest, I bet he will be pleased.
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Date: 3/27/2022 9:25:00 AM
I really like this organic, open verse, Lasaad! very much allows the reader time to take it in, stanza 2 is my fave, quite creative!
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