Sky

Sky was talking to me at the break of dawn, told me to forget all about myself, even if for a 
while.
Cotton clouds became my friends, fairies i have known all my life...was delighted to see 
them, 
time had frozen and memories of a different time were all but shadows.
Caught the moon staring at me... soothing, like freedom freed from the chains of instability.
Sky was painted crimson,  pure and expressionless....motionless, i stood still...surrounded by 
purity...monotony,
i was alone....we were alone....locked up in that moment...expressions lost in time.....
i felt empty, like a feather with nothing to wish for....nothing i wanted anymore.....
This was another world, cold as ice....a vacuum which can not be filled...
we stood in silence,
words were not necessary anymore.
I was drowning in the spell....unknown emotions...captured by magic and alone to surrender 
in vain.
it hypnotized me, scared me surprisingly.....taking me to a state of hysteria...
until i was flying....free, cold and calm....until i closed my eyes and made a vow to never 
look at the sky again.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 11/12/2010 8:49:00 AM
Thanks for reading my poem and leaving the comment, Rinki. I'm sorry I misspelled your name. My vision seems to be a bit impared lately -- much like my brain. Best wishes, Carolyn
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Date: 11/11/2010 9:31:00 AM
A thought-provoking poem for sure, Randy. While looking at the sky, I feel a sense of calmness that comes (I think) from realizing we are but specks in the universe. Part of a grander plan. Interesting how you went from hysteria to calmness. Captivating poem! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 10/30/2010 10:56:00 PM
Hi Rinki :) this really made me think-- I enjoyed how you depicted the sky here and gave it depth--the sky sure can be mesmerizing sometimes and just takes my breath away-- have a great weekend! --nikko :)
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Date: 10/2/2010 10:15:00 PM
Welcome to PS, Randy..I hope you will enjoy your stay here..Thanks for sharing this..to get more exposure for your work please read the works of others and leave comments too. Have a good weekend! Peace, Audrey
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Date: 10/2/2010 6:26:00 AM
Very creative and impressive narrative on sky, rinki
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