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Sizzling Cliches

An effervescent sizzling rain
falls outside my window panes
dreary, stay home day
A day for brewing pekoe tea 
not one for walking by the sea
an early spring cliche



Date:4/22/12
*The form definition says a 
rhyming couplet of NORMALLY
meaning NOT ALWAYS 8 syllables
and a shorter 3rd line

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 5/17/2012 1:55:00 PM

A belated congratulations on your win in Susan's "Tail Rhyme Time" contest Debbie. Love, Carol

Joseph May

Date: 5/16/2012 9:41:00 AM

congrats on your win..

Joseph May

Date: 5/16/2012 9:40:00 AM

congrats on your win..

Bl Devnath

Date: 5/15/2012 1:14:00 PM

Congrats on your win in the contest, loved always, bl

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/15/2012 5:07:00 AM

enjoyed the kinesthetic appeal, debbie.. congrats on your win!..:) huggs

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/14/2012 8:49:00 PM

debbie, I really like this one. GREAT topic you chose for it too. Congratulations.

Ralph Taylor

Date: 5/14/2012 6:24:00 PM

Congrats on your win, Deb. Outstanding. Great job. hugs, Ralph

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 5/14/2012 5:49:00 PM

Awesome write,Debbie.Congrats on your win.....

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 5/14/2012 5:49:00 PM

Awesome write,Debbie.Congrats on your win.....

Debra Squyres

Date: 5/14/2012 2:58:00 PM

And I worked so hard on getting they syllable count right lol.....I like this !! Sounds like a lovely cup of tea day !! Congrats on your winning placement.

Joann Grisetti

Date: 5/14/2012 1:21:00 PM

Peaceful day - great for tea. Love this. Congratulations.

Kash Poet

Date: 5/14/2012 11:29:00 AM

Congrats Debbie on your win.Loved it.

David Williams

Date: 5/14/2012 11:23:00 AM

Debbie congrats on your win..David

Deborah Burch

Date: 5/14/2012 11:09:00 AM

Well Done my friend!!! Congratulations!!! on your win!! Big hugs...love ya , deb

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 5/14/2012 11:02:00 AM

Congrats on your win Debbie xx

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/26/2012 3:34:00 PM

One day you and I wil be drinking that pekoe tea together and wondering what the next phase of our lives will bring. Very lovely, Deb. I think the eight lines are optional according to the definition. Best wishes in the contest, my friend! Love, Carolyn

Kash Poet

Date: 4/24/2012 11:43:00 AM

A learning for me:)

Gwendolen Song

Date: 4/23/2012 6:57:00 PM

I just wrote my very first tail rhyme today and I can tell ya, I gotta long way til mine looks as awesome as this one! Love the pic that accompanies this "stay home day"...awww. So relaxing!....If you write s-e-n-i-l-e-f-e-l-i-n-e-s on a piece of paper and read it both ways, it really does make an interesting palindrome...I really had to do some homework to write that entry..Thanks for stopping by...I see you've got MORE winning poetry to read today...Alright! :) Gwendolen

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 4/26/2012 3:35:00 PM

What a great palindrome, Gwen!!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 4/23/2012 5:06:00 AM

wonderful day and write... we have the same pic??... huggs! :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/22/2012 11:01:00 PM

this is awesome, Debs. One of the better tail rhymes I have read here! Hope it scores well for ya.

Carrie Richards

Date: 4/22/2012 7:20:00 PM

love it....and love that kind of day, as well! You have made it all sound cozy and inviting! :).....ps...I did enter my sonnet for your contest a few days ago...not sure why it didn't register for you??? So just in case, I went to my member site...removed my entry, and re-entered the same poem...must be some glitch in the soup??? Hope you got it this time...if not, I'll try again. Thanks for letting me know :) hugs!