William Kelii Kekaula Poet Rhyme

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Simply Breathtaking

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Simply Breathtaking 

Upon its advent
done ... it came and went
so characterless
this working process
from depths, we inhale
therefrom, we exhale
breath names this function
to be ... its junction
          ~~breath
relieved sigh ... expire 
deep snoring ... respire.

We take breaths from out
inside whirls about
cache paired lungs fill up
all calm, we letup
in-out when at home
out-in while we roam
climb uphill we huff
candles out we puff
          ~~breath
through life ... unnoticed
keeps death ... remotest.

As we be breathed 
brings us this life
as we unbreathed
blessed afterlife.

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Paula Goldsmith August 19, 2021 at 10:44 AM Congratulations on your win. What a creative story/write your "Simply Breathtaking" is. Have a blessed day with your win............... William Kelii Kekaula August 19, 2021 at 10:46 AM Blessings, Paula, your thoughts are appreciated, Aloha!

Mystic Rose Rose August 19, 2021 at 10:05 AM A beautiful creation indeed, much loved, congrats William Kelii Kekaula August 19, 2021 at 10:45 AM I am pleasantly gratified, Rose, Aloha!

Sam Kauffman August 19, 2021 at 9:59 AM This is breathtaking William. You have taken the simple act of inhaling and exhaling and transformed it into a poetic blessing. I do love the last stanza. I couldn't quite get into this theme but it is wonderful to see your "breathing" creation. Aloha! Blessings! William Kelii Kekaula August 19, 2021 at 10:43 AM Sam, I find US challenges, thought-provoking to the point that when something comes to mind, it's over, so I understand your meaning. When it jumps out to you, done. I'm glad as always for your generous sharing my friend, Aloha!

Unseeking Seeker August 19, 2021 at 8:51 AM Compelling! Congrats on your win, William! William Kelii Kekaula August 19, 2021 at 9:37 AM Appreciate it, US, it was fun, Aloha!

Malabika Ray Choudhury August 13, 2021 at 4:45 AM Dear William, this is a great write - and so philosophical! The rhyme-scheme matches so beautifully with the depth of the poem. Aloha ~ Mala William Kelii Kekaula August 13, 2021 at 9:46 AM Mala, your insights serve you nicely and I appreciate your gracious and thoughtful considerations my friend, Aloha!

Sara Kendrick August 13, 2021 at 3:13 AM Yes, most of the time we don't think about the fact that our lungs are working all the time. It is only when we are having trouble do we realize what a precious thing the gift of fresh air is in our daily lives. I enjoyed reading your work. Thanks for dropping by my page with a kind review of my work. Sara William Kelii Kekaula August 13, 2021 at 9:34 AM I agree as I've crossed paths with oxygen users, my aunt of long ago being among the numbers. You are most certainly welcomed, Sara, and likewise, I am grateful to you in-kind my friend, Aloha.

Joanna Daniel August 13, 2021 at 2:01 AM I like the rhythm and flow and the theme of this poem, William, hope it places high on the winner's list:) William Kelii Kekaula August 13, 2021 at 9:25 AM I am grateful for your thoughtful considerations, Jo, and for boosting my spirit my friend, Aloha!

Darlene De Beaulieu August 12, 2021 at 3:42 PM Hello william kekaula, I could not have said it better myself. Well said. my friend. Blessings. Darlene De Beaulieu August 13, 2021 at 11:20 AM Hello William Keklaula, Your welcome my friend. I am pleased to make you smile. Aloha!! Darlene. William Kelii Kekaula August 12, 2021 at 3:54 PM You are a charming lady, Darlene, I just love the smile that you put on my face this wondrous day my friend, Aloha!