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*Image of Dandelion Blowing Childhood by Pixabay. Simply Breathtaking Upon its advent done ... it came and went so characterless this working process from depths, we inhale therefrom, we exhale breath names this function to be ... its junction ~~breath relieved sigh ... expire deep snoring ... respire. We take breaths from out inside whirls about cache paired lungs fill up all calm, we letup in-out when at home out-in while we roam climb uphill we huff candles out we puff ~~breath through life ... unnoticed keeps death ... remotest. As we be breathed brings us this life as we unbreathed blessed afterlife. 2021 August 11 *9th Place* As we be breathed ~~Unseeking Seeker

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/19/2021 10:44:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a creative story/write your "Simply Breathtaking" is. Have a blessed day with your win...............

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/19/2021 10:46:00 AM

Blessings, Paula, your thoughts are appreciated, Aloha!

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 8/19/2021 10:05:00 AM

A beautiful creation indeed, much loved, congrats

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/19/2021 10:45:00 AM

I am pleasantly gratified, Rose, Aloha!

Sam Kauffman

Date: 8/19/2021 9:59:00 AM

This is breathtaking William. You have taken the simple act of inhaling and exhaling and transformed it into a poetic blessing. I do love the last stanza. I couldn't quite get into this theme but it is wonderful to see your "breathing" creation. Aloha! Blessings!

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/19/2021 10:43:00 AM

Sam, I find US challenges, thought-provoking to the point that when something comes to mind, it's over, so I understand your meaning. When it jumps out to you, done. I'm glad as always for your generous sharing my friend, Aloha!

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 8/19/2021 8:51:00 AM

Compelling! Congrats on your win, William!

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/19/2021 9:37:00 AM

Appreciate it, US, it was fun, Aloha!

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 8/13/2021 4:45:00 AM

Dear William, this is a great write - and so philosophical! The rhyme-scheme matches so beautifully with the depth of the poem. Aloha ~ Mala

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/13/2021 9:46:00 AM

Mala, your insights serve you nicely and I appreciate your gracious and thoughtful considerations my friend, Aloha!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/13/2021 3:13:00 AM

Yes, most of the time we don't think about the fact that our lungs are working all the time. It is only when we are having trouble do we realize what a precious thing the gift of fresh air is in our daily lives. I enjoyed reading your work. Thanks for dropping by my page with a kind review of my work. Sara

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/13/2021 9:34:00 AM

I agree as I've crossed paths with oxygen users, my aunt of long ago being among the numbers. You are most certainly welcomed, Sara, and likewise, I am grateful to you in-kind my friend, Aloha.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 8/13/2021 2:01:00 AM

I like the rhythm and flow and the theme of this poem, William, hope it places high on the winner's list:)

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/13/2021 9:25:00 AM

I am grateful for your thoughtful considerations, Jo, and for boosting my spirit my friend, Aloha!

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 8/12/2021 3:42:00 PM

Hello william kekaula, I could not have said it better myself. Well said. my friend. Blessings.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 8/13/2021 11:20:00 AM

Hello William Keklaula, Your welcome my friend. I am pleased to make you smile. Aloha!! Darlene.

Hilo Poet
Date: 8/12/2021 3:54:00 PM

You are a charming lady, Darlene, I just love the smile that you put on my face this wondrous day my friend, Aloha!