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Simply Breathtaking

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*Image of Dandelion Blowing Childhood by Pixabay.
Simply Breathtaking 

Upon its advent
done ... it came and went
so characterless
this working process
from depths, we inhale
therefrom, we exhale
breath names this function
to be ... its junction
          ~~breath
relieved sigh ... expire 
deep snoring ... respire.

We take breaths from out
inside whirls about
cache paired lungs fill up
all calm, we letup
in-out when at home
out-in while we roam
climb uphill we huff
candles out we puff
          ~~breath
through life ... unnoticed
keeps death ... remotest.

As we be breathed 
brings us this life
as we unbreathed
blessed afterlife.

2021 August 11
*9th Place*
As we be breathed
~~Unseeking Seeker

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Paula Goldsmith Date: 8/19/2021 10:44:00 AM Congratulations on your win. What a creative story/write your "Simply Breathtaking" is. Have a blessed day with your win............... Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 8/19/2021 10:46:00 AM Blessings, Paula, your thoughts are appreciated, Aloha!

Mystic Rose Rose Date: 8/19/2021 10:05:00 AM A beautiful creation indeed, much loved, congrats Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 8/19/2021 10:45:00 AM I am pleasantly gratified, Rose, Aloha!

Sam Kauffman Date: 8/19/2021 9:59:00 AM This is breathtaking William. You have taken the simple act of inhaling and exhaling and transformed it into a poetic blessing. I do love the last stanza. I couldn't quite get into this theme but it is wonderful to see your "breathing" creation. Aloha! Blessings! Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 8/19/2021 10:43:00 AM Sam, I find US challenges, thought-provoking to the point that when something comes to mind, it's over, so I understand your meaning. When it jumps out to you, done. I'm glad as always for your generous sharing my friend, Aloha!

Unseeking Seeker Date: 8/19/2021 8:51:00 AM Compelling! Congrats on your win, William! Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 8/19/2021 9:37:00 AM Appreciate it, US, it was fun, Aloha!

Malabika Ray Choudhury Date: 8/13/2021 4:45:00 AM Dear William, this is a great write - and so philosophical! The rhyme-scheme matches so beautifully with the depth of the poem. Aloha ~ Mala Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 8/13/2021 9:46:00 AM Mala, your insights serve you nicely and I appreciate your gracious and thoughtful considerations my friend, Aloha!

Sara Kendrick Date: 8/13/2021 3:13:00 AM Yes, most of the time we don't think about the fact that our lungs are working all the time. It is only when we are having trouble do we realize what a precious thing the gift of fresh air is in our daily lives. I enjoyed reading your work. Thanks for dropping by my page with a kind review of my work. Sara Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 8/13/2021 9:34:00 AM I agree as I've crossed paths with oxygen users, my aunt of long ago being among the numbers. You are most certainly welcomed, Sara, and likewise, I am grateful to you in-kind my friend, Aloha.

Joanna Daniel Date: 8/13/2021 2:01:00 AM I like the rhythm and flow and the theme of this poem, William, hope it places high on the winner's list:) Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 8/13/2021 9:25:00 AM I am grateful for your thoughtful considerations, Jo, and for boosting my spirit my friend, Aloha!

Darlene De Beaulieu Date: 8/12/2021 3:42:00 PM Hello william kekaula, I could not have said it better myself. Well said. my friend. Blessings. Login to Reply Darlene De Beaulieu Date: 8/13/2021 11:20:00 AM Hello William Keklaula, Your welcome my friend. I am pleased to make you smile. Aloha!! Darlene. Hilo Poet Date: 8/12/2021 3:54:00 PM You are a charming lady, Darlene, I just love the smile that you put on my face this wondrous day my friend, Aloha!