Silent Thunder

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Soft, subtle whispers of conscience within
They burn, upturn, compelling doublethink 
Redeem hermit, soul from possible sin

Senses five immerse us in outer din
Severing thus from God, our divine link 
Soft, subtle whispers of conscience within

Child’s soul innocent, feels pricking of pin
Those who listen, glisten, whilst others sink 
Redeem hermit, soul from possible sin

Presence imbibes bliss from pores of our skin
Love lotus blooms, luminescence bright pink
Soft, subtle whispers of conscience within

Nip ego desire before it begins
Heed truth hues etched in indelible ink
Redeem hermit, soul from possible sin

Divine restores light of our origin
The doing we do is mind with love sync
Soft, subtle whispers of conscience within
Redeem hermit, soul from possible sin

01-June-2021

Lipogram Poem Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Emile Pinet

Vowel omitted ‘a’

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Phil Capitano

Date: 6/4/2021 3:15:00 AM

Truth lies bleeding in the street, "I can't breathe" the repeat, Nowhere to run with these feet, Get out of the kitchen if you can't take the heat. Great poem Seeker.

L Milton Hankins

Date: 6/1/2021 9:45:00 AM

Oh how I loved your villanelle, Unseeking Seeker, and to write it without using the letter "a" was masterful. Best wishes in the contest.

Unseeking Seeker
Date: 6/1/2021 7:03:00 PM

Hahaha ... you like it bcoz you lean towards the villanelle form! Thanks! I’m happy with the way it turned out, too :)

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 6/1/2021 1:09:00 AM

Well composed villanelle. And I agree with the dictates of our conscience. Which seems lacking in most people these days.

Unseeking Seeker
Date: 6/1/2021 11:44:00 PM

Thanks for your encouragement, Victor!