Siesta

Idly the weary ceiling fan rotates Air is hot but bearable A mood for lethargy. Sprawled on the bed my Venus lies asleep Splintered light through slanting blinds Highlights her naked skin. ------------------------------------------------- Contest: Let's Try a Little Kimo Sponsor: Amy Green 29th May 2014

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Verlena S. Walker

Date: 6/15/2014 3:47:00 AM

Nicely written Paul. GL in the contest

Paul Callus
Date: 6/15/2014 3:50:00 PM

Thank you Verlena...for the visit and kind wishes. // paul

Aiyah Torres

Date: 6/2/2014 5:32:00 PM

ooohhh... siesta is what I need!!! lol... Nice poem, Sir!!! ..very awesome lines.. I liked it!! :O))

Aiyah Torres
Date: 6/2/2014 10:49:00 PM

I sure love it, Paul!!! thanks for the invitation.. :O)))

Paul Callus
Date: 6/2/2014 5:43:00 PM

Hi AiyaH! So glad to see you stopping by and commenting positively on my poem. On hot days there's nothing better than a restful siesta...you're welcome to come and relax!:) // paul

Casarah Nance

Date: 6/2/2014 3:44:00 PM

ooo very relaxing, entrancing images. :)

Paul Callus
Date: 6/2/2014 4:26:00 PM

Thank you Casarah...it is meant to be relaxing, so you did get the right feeling! glad you were enticed, too. // paul

David Williams

Date: 6/2/2014 11:59:00 AM

Paul I love the images in these, well done and good luck...David

Paul Callus
Date: 6/2/2014 4:28:00 PM

Thank you David, both for stopping by and for the lovely comments. // paul

Joseph May

Date: 6/2/2014 7:05:00 AM

Ahh...the Goddess of love and beauty...Beautifully penned Paul...I love the song by Frankie Avalon too...

Paul Callus
Date: 6/2/2014 10:44:00 AM

Glad you like this kimo, Joseph. Yes, Frankie Avalon had some good songs, Venus being one of the (takes me way back!). // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/1/2014 7:45:00 AM

It sounds like orbiting Venus garnishes some pretty spectacular views. I enjoyed this voyeuristic marvel.

Paul Callus
Date: 6/1/2014 2:05:00 PM

Hi Richard; your last comment just about sums it all up! Thanks a lot. // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/31/2014 10:49:00 PM

A visual feast of romantic enchantment Paul. Amy should love this one! I do!

Paul Callus
Date: 6/1/2014 7:34:00 AM

Hi Connie! glad you've been romantically enchanted! Love your comments & txs for stopping by. // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/31/2014 11:19:00 AM

Dear Paul, I am sending you a Soup mail so I can get a Birthday Booklet to you!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/31/2014 1:08:00 PM

Many thanks dear Carolyn! I have just answered your mail. I appreciate your dedication! :) // paul

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 5/31/2014 9:02:00 AM

Nice poem and nice for the contest. When I was growing up - we had no air condition. All we had was a fan, but I don't remember the days being so hot as they are today. Thanks for sharing...Lucilla

Paul Callus
Date: 5/31/2014 1:34:00 PM

Thanks for stopping by, Lucilla. I still have no air conditioners in the house; they are not on good terms with my eyes! Still use fans, although as you say the temperature seems to get hotter year after year. Take care. // paul

Lena Emp

Date: 5/31/2014 12:57:00 AM

I love to siesta, so as to enjoyed reading this one Paul. You give a light meaningful thoughts about it. Wonderful Poem.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/31/2014 1:29:00 PM

Thank you Lena; so glad you love this poem....and your siesta:) cu // paul

Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/30/2014 10:45:00 PM

How can one say anything, you said it so well, amazing write that I am sure makes all wish for a little Siesta!!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/31/2014 1:27:00 PM

Glad you liked it Arthur! Thank you for the positive comments. // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/30/2014 12:39:00 PM

- Siesta is good for body and soul - Beautiful poem, Paul ! - Luck in contest ! - Wish you a nice weekend - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 5/30/2014 2:08:00 PM

Thank you Anne Lise! Txs for stopping by...and happy weekend to you too :) /x/ paul

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/29/2014 9:19:00 PM

Oh wow.....I love these......on a hot day here, it hits the nail right on the sizzling head !! Wonderful job!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/30/2014 11:35:00 AM

Hi Carrie! with comments like these you can stop by any time you want! you're more than welcome :) // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 5/29/2014 2:52:00 PM

awesome write, Paul

Paul Callus
Date: 5/29/2014 3:45:00 PM

Thank you Jack; so pleased that you enjoyed! cu // paul

Kim Van Breda

Date: 5/29/2014 9:42:00 AM

Yes !! Great sensory in this one.. felt the humidity, heard the fan and pictured the splintering light on her body. Awesome name for a format... if you take away the 'o' :) Xx~Xx

Paul Callus
Date: 5/29/2014 12:05:00 PM

Oh yes, Kim...you sure got caught in the feel of this poem! Love your comments :) As for the format...I never had any doubts that Kim is an awesome name!:)) Love your wit, too :) // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/29/2014 6:21:00 AM

OOOh, what a beautiful image you created, Paul. Quite sensual and provocative as well. I'm sure Amy will love your Kimo as much as I do. Wishing you success in the contest! Love, carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 5/29/2014 11:53:00 AM

Thank you so very much, Carolyn! Glad that this write made you feel this way...it's what I aimed for :) Hope Amy reasons like you :)) // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/29/2014 6:13:00 AM

visual art expressed through the canvas of poetry, paul.. this reminds me of a charmed afternoon delight!.. huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 5/29/2014 11:49:00 AM

I love these comments of yours, Nette! They show that I managed to pass on what I set out to achieve. [the picture in my mind is in black and white...colour would not bring out the same effect!] // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/29/2014 5:23:00 AM

Very expressive and descriptive work..Way to go for the contest..Thanks for the visit to my page with congrats..Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 5/29/2014 11:43:00 AM

Thanks for the lovely comments, Sara; so glad you enjoyed it :) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 5/28/2014 11:08:00 PM

loools :D that's the punch again :D :P i like how you made your way of slumber state then well too something lil censored :D (joking) well the Venus side.. :D a combination of: first: sleeping and something that will make someone jolt :P second: dizziness and wakefulness.. :D :P two thumbs up... your siestas are one of a kind.. :P remember this are just 30-45 min to be healthy :P

Paul Callus
Date: 5/29/2014 2:05:00 AM

Thank you Olive_eloi :) I like your dissection! I will follow your advice, so I had better go and wake Venus up because she has slept over the limit:) // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/28/2014 9:45:00 PM

btw, I am seeing two kimo instead of just one. Is it her rule to do two?? I have one to post but I am sure seeing lots of people doing pairs of them~

Paul Callus
Date: 5/29/2014 2:00:00 AM

If I am not mistaken she said "short or long" up to us....but better to go over the rules again!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/28/2014 9:44:00 PM

This is very good. First the day of lethargy described and then the Venus described . I really like your images.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/29/2014 2:03:00 AM

Glad this is to your liking! good luck with yours, Andrea....paul

Ana Espinola Collins

Date: 5/28/2014 6:26:00 PM

Hot and sexy in so few words...nicely done Paul :) Ana

Paul Callus
Date: 5/29/2014 2:15:00 AM

Thank you Ana! I welcome your lovely comments:) // paul

Frederic Parker

Date: 5/28/2014 6:15:00 PM

has a Rod Mckuen feel to it very discriptive

Paul Callus
Date: 5/29/2014 2:23:00 AM

Thank you Frederic! I've heard of Rod Mckuen, but I will now go and look him up to learn more about him. (I think he was a composer too.) // paul

Jadazzle United

Date: 5/28/2014 5:52:00 PM

ooh hot and sultry in that order - I loved these verses Paul! Hugs Jan xxxx

Jadazzle United
Date: 5/29/2014 2:33:00 AM

Shhhhh I'm in disguise Paul :-) I always put Jan after my comments Darren doesn't put his name. We can both log onto the account so can both comment on poems - its the best of both worlds and I get to write with the awesome Darren Watson - I'm the luckiest lady in the world! Hugs as ever Jan xxxx

Paul Callus
Date: 5/29/2014 2:27:00 AM

Thank you Jan for appreciating and commenting so positively!:) Glad you enjoyed. [do you speak for Jan & Co ??!!:))] // paul

Tim Smith

Date: 5/28/2014 5:37:00 PM

These are wonderful Paul. I love the picture you painted....Tim

Paul Callus
Date: 5/29/2014 2:34:00 AM

Thank you Tim; I appreciate your feedback. // paul