William Kelii Kekaula Poet Tail-rhyme

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'shoo' You Too

*Image of Wildlife Control by APEX.

'Shoo' You Too

The amour of the eve, set the faces pleased,
The extent to engage, the moments were seized,
To placate the tone, their unions at ease,
                         The change was set for such a view.
Unspooled moon roams free its chambered mood,
Couples were being apart, settling in quietude,
Lips tender touches, eyes favor upon the good,
                         Here the grayish fury star the shrew.
That sits just so unrestrained, poised triumphantly,
Yet, it scurries about there, most unopposedly,
Amongst affluent served by destitute, unerringly,
                         And now he is about to form a coup.
He dashes mid the silvers and other polished wares,
Swoops in and out demitasses to frightful stares,
Takes pleasure in the measure of tenuous glares,
                         Rich leaves, poor cleans, laughs queue.

2019 September 21
*1st Place*
ALL YOURS (Jun 23)
~~Brian Strand: Judged 2021 June 24

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Aniruddha Pathak June 24, 2021 at 10:16 PM Curiosity led me to read this, wondering what bird be this Tail Rhyme, but it was a rewarding reading, a nice poem too, and congrats for the first place William Kelii Kekaula June 24, 2021 at 10:30 PM It is about a shrew/mouse that the destitute/poor must shoo, yet in the end, their masters, the affluent/rich left. Much thanks indeed, Aniruddha, have a nice day my friend, Aloha!

Sam Kauffman June 24, 2021 at 9:45 AM Very clever my friend! Love the way you use a classical poetry style to describe a common critter - tongue in cheek. Also love the rhyme scheme. Congratulations on your win! This was fun. Aloha! ke Akua pu! (I like that!) William Kelii Kekaula June 24, 2021 at 12:35 PM I wrote this in my first year, learning most of the poetry forms that were out there, and thought to give this one a try. Thanks, Sam, your words mean much to me in both languages (lol) my friend, Aloha!

Christuraj Alex June 24, 2021 at 12:41 AM Beautiful. Congratulations! William Kelii Kekaula June 24, 2021 at 1:14 AM Thank you, Christuraj, Aloha!