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She Wished Upon a Star

Moonlight shone upon her As she wished upon a star What price would it incur For wishes that are so far Need for it to come true Would each have a price Could happiness ensue Her hope for a paradise Wishes for a kind of love That few would ever find Wishes sent to up above Hoped stars to be so kind She wished every night A true love that would fill Prayed to the starlight Love one day would reveal And so she sat awaiting For a wish to come to be The thought intoxicating One day to be her reality Honorable Mention Contest:STRAND SELECT 3 Sponsor:Brian Strand

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Sam Kauffman

Date: 1/5/2020 10:39:00 PM

Hi Brenda, Congratulations on your placement with this lovely poem so filled with expextancy and hope - hopep looking for a place to live.

Brenda Chiri
Date: 1/6/2020 12:13:00 AM

Thank you Sam you are so kind!;)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/5/2020 7:22:00 AM

Tender wishes--lovely write--congrats on your win Brenda.

Brenda Chiri
Date: 1/5/2020 7:25:00 AM

Thank you Vijay!;)

Edward Ibeh

Date: 1/4/2020 8:11:00 PM

Congrats on getting HM, Brenda:-) Well-done!

Brenda Chiri
Date: 1/4/2020 8:39:00 PM

Thank you so much Edward!;$

Line Gauthier

Date: 12/25/2019 9:24:00 AM

Lovely, Brenda. Merry Christmas! Best wishes to you and your loved ones for 2020.

Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/25/2019 11:36:00 AM

Merry Christmas line! Thank you!;)

M. L. Kiser

Date: 12/20/2019 11:23:00 AM

May she find that love; beautiful and Happy Holidays.

Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/20/2019 11:24:00 AM

Happy holidays!;)

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 12/19/2019 8:57:00 PM

I do hope that you are the she, and your wishes have all come true!

Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/20/2019 5:37:00 AM

Yea I hope one day it does too! Thank you my county friend!;)

Xuefeng Pan

Date: 12/18/2019 9:39:00 PM

This is classic! Very impressed with the rhyming...

Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/20/2019 5:36:00 AM

Thank you!;)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/18/2019 8:41:00 AM

Oh no, there goes a perfectly nice ass. I’ll try not to laugh to hard as I can’t afford to laugh mine off.

Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/20/2019 5:36:00 AM

Well rick I have to take your word for it! Lol but thank you!;)

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 12/16/2019 2:47:00 PM

Arousing poetry, Bre. C! Made me think of the lush Rolls Royce song. Anticipation is the a most dreamy feeling of ecstasy. You conveyed this yearning sensation beautifully. Aurora bright write! Love and hugs forever.

Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/18/2019 7:40:00 AM

Ahhh Freddie I do love your comments! Thank you!;)

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 12/16/2019 2:26:00 PM

Lovely penning Brenda,such good rhyme and flow. Hope you'll have a great Christmas, Blessings always,Gordon

Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/18/2019 7:39:00 AM

Gordon always a pleasure to read your comments!;)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/16/2019 8:56:00 AM

A little less wishing and a little more human interaction and I think this young woman will be pleasantly surprised how many of her wishes will come to fruition. Hugs Rick.

Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/18/2019 7:38:00 AM

Lmao! That is so true Rick I really appreciate your words!;)

Harry Horsman

Date: 12/15/2019 10:52:00 PM

Someone wishing so hard for true love. yet i sense a message in there as well, not of just the one person, but of so many, like the whole world. happy festive season, Brenda, love the poem.....

Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/18/2019 7:37:00 AM

Harry thank you so much;)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 12/15/2019 5:23:00 PM

Sounds like the subject of your poem, Ms. Wishmore, will have to go on a gluteus maximus shrinkage-reduction program---after all that sitting and waiting! LOL. Nice one, Brenda. :) gw

Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/18/2019 7:37:00 AM

Yes miss wishmore always wishes maybe one day her wish will come to be ! Thank you Gershon!;)

Quoth Theraven

Date: 12/15/2019 4:30:00 PM

Brenda, Your poem's starlit love-wish reminded me of Poe's 'A Dream Within A Dream'. 'Yet if hope has flown away In a night, or in a day, In a vision, or in none, Is it therefore the less gone? All that we see or seem Is but a dream within a dream. -Edgar Allan Poe

Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/18/2019 7:36:00 AM

Thank you Richard I so appreciate your visit and as always your kind words!;)

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/15/2019 9:32:00 AM

Hi Brenda, I'm hoping that wish comes true for her and others like her. We all need to find that kind love in our life time. Well done my friend:-) Alexis

Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/18/2019 7:36:00 AM

Alexis I'm hoping it does too! Merry Xmas my friend!;)

Na Na

Date: 12/15/2019 6:23:00 AM

Best of luck on the wish. Thanks for sharing this

Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/18/2019 7:35:00 AM

Gregory thank you! You are too kind!;)

Tom Cunningham

Date: 12/15/2019 6:03:00 AM

I hope that her wish comes through Brenda, Tom

Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/18/2019 7:35:00 AM

Tom thank you so very much!;)