Notes About The Poem

I'm working with rhyming; something I normally do not do. The first few lines came to me and the rest flowed. She is hopeful, but she is lonely and she just needs to accept and love her own surroundings. 

She Blew In Like a Breeze

She blew in like a breeze
Slow at first, rustling the trees
Her thoughts give her away
She is hoping they will stay 
Loneliness is visible on her face
Confused, she asks “Where is this place?”
The others, glance at her 
Their silence and stares deter
Fear overtakes her mind
Wanting to leave but feeling confined
She closes her eyes and silences her thoughts
Take me away she thinks as she plots
Eyes open, beauty restored
No longer in that place where people ignore
Peaceful amongst nature
Taking in her creator
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Weir Avatar
December 21, 2018 at 7:39 AM
Susan, I enjoyed re-reading the poem several times! Nice contrast between a woman feeling lonely and confined around people; while she finds comfort and peace in the solitude of her natural world. Sanford
Devonshire Avatar
November 26, 2018 at 3:03 PM
This poem is a treasure, Susan. I love the way she becomes acclimated to her new surroundings when she appreciates the peace find in nature and the joy of faith.
House Avatar
November 29, 2018 at 4:29 PM
Thank you Carolyn, I appreciate the kind words.
Horsman Avatar
November 19, 2018 at 4:47 PM
Although she blew in, the poetry emulate such peace and calmness, truly a wonderful poem to read,
House Avatar
November 29, 2018 at 4:29 PM
Thank you so much Harry!
Warrior Avatar
November 16, 2018 at 8:26 PM
Excellent my friend...rhyming like a breeze lol...love & light...^WW^
House Avatar
November 17, 2018 at 6:26 PM
Love and Light to you. I really appreciate your opinion. I am a fan of yours.
Marcum Wong Avatar
November 16, 2018 at 1:26 AM
Nature heals as it restores one to a sense of peace. Lovely Susan! Very nice to meet you. Welcome to Poetry Soup! : )
House Avatar
November 17, 2018 at 6:25 PM
Thank you Connie. I enjoyed writing this one.
Krutsinger Avatar
November 15, 2018 at 3:17 PM
Confused, she asks, "Where is this place?" I imagine this is exactly what happens.
House Avatar
November 29, 2018 at 4:31 PM
Thank you Caren, I agree, I would ask that as well.
Sands Avatar
November 15, 2018 at 2:20 PM
Well done Susan :) I enjoyed it.
House Avatar
November 15, 2018 at 2:21 PM
Thank you, I really appreciate it!
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