Shame

fame cold vein intrepid heart now remained no one left to blame a sleepy hush falls over my name shame

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Sandra L. Weiss

Date: 11/28/2019 4:11:00 PM

Only a fine line separates fame and shame. One can lead to the other, so sad to see it happen. This opened train of thought.

Brenda Chiri

Date: 10/30/2019 2:04:00 AM

Never shame over your name my friend! But friend should be over it! Nice write but you make s better friend then s shames person!;) ha! That made me smile to try to imagine you doing something that causes shame!;)

Mahtab Bangalee

Date: 10/16/2019 5:51:00 AM

shame- a name of defame!

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 10/4/2019 12:29:00 AM

Famous and Fearless with heart pumping someone feels shame enfolding their name - have not achieved their goal. That is how I see it - had to have a shot at this profound write. Hugs, Jennifer.

Elaine Perrin

Date: 10/3/2019 6:32:00 AM

Love this, cleverly put :-) x

Gershon Wolf

Date: 8/30/2019 2:20:00 PM

Too often there's only a thin line, indeed, between fame and shame, which you've pointed out so poetically, Richard. Nice. :) gw

Maurice Rigoler

Date: 8/27/2019 11:24:00 AM

Never thought of Liberace, sir, but his tuxedos fit my penguin's description. Thanks for the stop by as always. / M

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 8/13/2019 3:27:00 PM

"a sleepy hush falls over my name" - sweetly done.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/10/2019 5:13:00 PM

Had to read twice then I understood. Great ninette!

Quoth Theraven
Date: 8/11/2019 2:40:00 PM

Kim, No, I almost muffed it. Fixed with a band-aid now. Thanks for the comment. -Richard

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/9/2019 12:37:00 PM

... what a shame, Richard ... very well done - Luck in the contest :) - // Anne-Lise :)

Quoth Theraven
Date: 8/11/2019 2:46:00 PM

Anne-Lise, I wonder why your violets changed color. And I also wonder how you got that wonderful name. I would give the name giver a great big hug every day if I were you. Thank you for your comment. -Richard

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/8/2019 2:31:00 PM

Pain seems to linger in the shadows in this sensitive piece Raven. Beautifully executed! : ) xxoo

Heidi Sands

Date: 8/8/2019 12:13:00 PM

Well done! I can feel a certain sadness with this. Great work with the form:)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/7/2019 11:16:00 AM

The first instance of shame caused them to hide themselves from God in the Garden. Since then Shame has been a constant companion. Still shame does not cover our nakedness.

Eve Roper

Date: 8/5/2019 1:08:00 PM

Nicely done with great impact...

Kurt Ravidas

Date: 8/5/2019 11:00:00 AM

To tell the truth, I didn't take ninette seriously before, but now I've changed my mind. It's amazing how such a frolicsome form can contain such a deep drama. Another good example of how forms mislead)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/4/2019 6:59:00 PM

yesss, deep and dark!

Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 8/4/2019 12:59:00 AM

so deep it can run in it's silence. Nicely written.

Quoth Theraven
Date: 8/4/2019 11:06:00 AM

Jeanne, Thank you kindly for this insightful comment. -Richard