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Shallow Love Is Like a Reverie

Shallow Love is Like a Reverie

Shallow love is bubblegum when the flavor burst begins.
Chew too long - the sweetness will be gone.
Shallow love doesn’t want to chew that same old piece of gum
on and on and on and on and on.

Shallow love is a Hollywood happy-ending movie.
It doesn’t delve into life’s grime and grit.
Shallow love hates sub-plots. When there are complications,
show’s over! Shallow love is done with it!

Like a reverie is shallow love - a dilly-dally dream,
a happy-ending movie, bubblegum sweet!
Shallow love can’t find the beauty in what comes with reality.
With love profound, shallow love cannot compete.

A lovely trance of pure romance is shallow love’s reverie.
But soon you realize that it is fake.
Though it’s divine to be lost in its dream, everybody knows. . . 
from  reveries you always must awake!

April 25, 2019
For Lu Loo's  Verses Of Metaphors 3- Rhyme Or Free Verse Only Poetry Contest

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Robert Johnson

Date: 5/4/2019 4:58:00 PM

Forgive me, but, :) sometimes one walking away doesn't mean it was shallow, but rather just only one person was swimming in the deep end. :/ :) But, yeah, I get it. Just wanted to stress that little bit of angst I was having with it. :) <3

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 5/4/2019 5:06:00 PM

re-reading some of my comments, I guess many poets got the meaning. I get what you are saying too, Robert. It would suck to have a deep love that was not deep for the other person.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 5/4/2019 5:05:00 PM

robert, I think nobody is getting this poem. I thought it was so clear that love based on pure desire that quickly sinks is much different from the true love that develops when two souls work hard at it to make it endure. Anyway, it did not place, so despite my hard work, I think it is a poem where my meaning was not understood.

M. L. Kiser

Date: 4/26/2019 4:27:00 PM

Love the gum metaphor here; shallow love is rather empty; like the old piece of chewed gum that no longer has a flavor. Beautifully done.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 4/26/2019 5:04:00 PM

actually marriage is the old gum (for me anyway) you just have to keep chewing on it and liking it. Those who fall in and out of love constantly are addicted to NEW gum and can't stick with anything once it gets old! haha

Ralph Sergi

Date: 4/26/2019 3:35:00 PM

I loved your exquisite choice of metaphors , especially the rhythm, Andrea!

Allen Beilschmidt Sr.

Date: 4/25/2019 10:34:00 PM

'a happy-ending movie, bubblegum sweet!' you tied these to comparisons together beautifully

Vijay Pandit

Date: 4/25/2019 4:41:00 PM

You defined it well Andrea: With love profound, shallow love cannot compete. Yet--people fall for it..they should heed your advice...from reveries you always must awake! All the best for a win at TOP.