Brian Davey Poet Dizain

Sewer of Sadness

Sewer of Sadness



Walking in the dark down a hole I fall
Slipping in the darkness that consumes me
Crashing to the bottom feeling so small
Wet sewerness in constant misery
She showed me the signs I chose not to see

Now in emptiness I long for the chance
to start over again in our romance
Knowing I will never receive this wish
Dreaming of her closeness in one more dance
waking up in defecation with fish



05/13/16

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Skat A July 12, 2016 at 1:46 AM Awesome win, Brian... skat

Richard Lamoureux May 21, 2016 at 5:47 AM Congratulations Brian! Brian Davey May 23, 2016 at 2:45 AM Thank you very much Richard

Joanna Daniel May 21, 2016 at 2:37 AM Congratulations on top spot Brian:) The imagery you used is great:) Brian Davey May 21, 2016 at 4:52 AM Thank you I am flattered

Karam Misra May 21, 2016 at 12:24 AM Congratulations on your top spot, Brian. Graphic and sad. ~kc~ Brian Davey May 21, 2016 at 4:52 AM Thank you Karam

Dineen Williams Gault May 20, 2016 at 7:06 PM Your imagery was potent, but when we have no chance with the one we desire, that's how it feels. Quite well done, congratulations! Brian Davey May 21, 2016 at 4:51 AM Thank you so much for your kind words I am pleased that you enjoyed it

Kim Rodrigues May 20, 2016 at 3:55 PM Visual of emotions! Congratulations, Brian! Brian Davey May 21, 2016 at 4:50 AM Thank you Kim

Sara Chansarkar May 20, 2016 at 3:38 PM Congratulations Brian, this is a heartfelt piece! Brian Davey May 21, 2016 at 4:50 AM Thank you Sara

Sandra Haight May 20, 2016 at 3:13 PM Very powerful sadness, Brian. Congratulations on your First Place win. Sandra Brian Davey May 21, 2016 at 4:50 AM I am humbled thank you so much!

Lukas Ficklin May 20, 2016 at 3:08 PM Oh to start over again would be grand, huh? The finality of it all is so gripping Brian. Congrats on your win. Brian Davey May 21, 2016 at 4:50 AM thank you so much Lukas

Beautiful Scars May 20, 2016 at 1:09 PM Brian, thank you for being a part of my contest and congrats on your top placement! -luloo :) Brian Davey May 20, 2016 at 2:24 PM Wow thank you so much luloo I am honored at my placement! Another great contest hosted also and I look forward to the next one!

Andrea Dietrich May 15, 2016 at 8:57 PM oh my goodness. a horrible image at the end, but goes well with the title of the poem. WEll done for Sad dizain contest. I ended up doing a story out of mine. If I ever get it posted!! Brian Davey May 18, 2016 at 5:49 PM Yah it is quite a nasty image isn't it! Look forward to reading yours (if you ever get it posted)

Mark Peterson May 13, 2016 at 9:07 PM Wow, Brian. An in your face kind of poem. I wasn't familiar with the form, but it is intriguing. Allows you to convey the setting of place and feeling rather well. Brian Davey May 14, 2016 at 1:22 AM Thank you mark it is actually the first poem that I have written in this form myself so I am happy to hear that it is well received