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Seventeen Is the Lucky Number

Beneath, weeping willow you lie supine
lamenting, veneration, muse divine
weakness of mind, love is my illusion
incidental rendezvous, delusion?
my dear, recall our ten idyllic hours
smelt the perfumed air of country flowers
bright your aura, impulsed a dark desire
breathtaking, you captivate and inspire
empath, know me, from marrow to the bone
blue bells hear the daisies whisper, atone
solemn moon, rheumy eyes, opalescent
spectre do tarry with me, you present?
extinguished, I blew out your mortal flame
my unnatural desires were to blame
sleep beauty, keeper of secrets, divine
beneath, weeping willow you lie supine

Placed First with thanks
Dated: 31/07/2019
Theme: My dear
Sponsor: Lu Loo
10 Words: weeping willow, supine, lamenting, veneration, weakness, ten, idyllic, aura, empath, incidental

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/8/2019 11:33:00 PM

This poem is stunning Georgia. I love your entry so much I am faving it! Congratulations on your very deserving first place win! : )

Georgia Kereopa
Date: 8/9/2019 12:46:00 AM

thank you for your compliment. I am touched that you have faved it.

Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 8/5/2019 8:45:00 AM

I love this. blue bells hear the daisies whisper my favorite line...Congrats on your well deserved win with this piece.

Georgia Kereopa
Date: 8/9/2019 12:43:00 AM

Jeanne, thanks for your comment about the flowers. Did think about that for a while, how to portray the monster without being too blatant.

Janis Medders Tobechi

Date: 8/5/2019 8:30:00 AM

This is great Georgia. Read it over and over it says it so beautifully in a style well done. Congratulations.

Georgia Kereopa
Date: 8/9/2019 12:40:00 AM

thank you for your reading Janis

Lu Loo

Date: 8/4/2019 2:49:00 PM

absolutely loved this...thank you for your participation and congratulations on your win. :)-luloo

Georgia Kereopa
Date: 8/4/2019 10:12:00 PM

Luloo, Im over the moon thank you

Susan Ashley

Date: 7/31/2019 3:51:00 PM

Georgia, your talented pen is potent and poignant in this darkly beautiful poem. The required words melt seamlessly into the tapestry of this stirring and moving piece. Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you.. ~Susan

Georgia Kereopa
Date: 8/2/2019 1:08:00 AM

Susan, thank you for reading my poem and your comments are inspiring and so I must write more.

Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 7/31/2019 12:17:00 PM

A beautiful illusion of love's simple hours.

Georgia Kereopa
Date: 8/2/2019 1:01:00 AM

HI Jeanne, thanks for reading and your comments are touching.

Kurt Ravidas

Date: 7/31/2019 9:39:00 AM

Wow, it wasn't easy, I think. Greatly penned, Georgia. Good luck in contest)

Georgia Kereopa
Date: 8/2/2019 1:00:00 AM

thanks Kurt for feedback which is encouraging, truly.