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Seven Sorry Soldiers

Seven sorry soldiers Hiding in a ditch Errol caught some shrapnel And then there were six Six sorry soldiers Barely glad to be alive Barrett took a bullet And then there were five Five sorry soldiers As brave as trained to be Geoff and Tom stood on a bomb That left only three Three sorry soldiers Curt and Blare and Ron Blare was scalped from a turret The other two went on Two sorry soldiers Ronald T and Curt Curtis had to press right on When Ronald B got hurt Just one sorry soldier: Curtis M McGee One of seven not yet in heaven That sorry soul is me

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Cynthia Buhain-Baello

Date: 3/28/2016 8:57:00 PM

Excellent poem on soldiers, the great price they pay for serving, and the amazing, exact word used repeatedly - "sorry" - which conveys the irony of it all. Brilliant writing, relevant and timely message, last line has a tremendous impact. Rated 7~~~Cynthia

Andrew Holt
Date: 3/28/2016 9:10:00 PM

I used alliteration intentionally to make the last line more poignant.

Andrew Holt
Date: 3/28/2016 9:06:00 PM

Thank you so much!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/28/2016 7:05:00 PM

Andrew, that is deep and must be hard to face... LINDA

Andrew Holt
Date: 3/28/2016 7:54:00 PM

Hi Linda. Is there any way to comment or receive comments for works submitted unless you are subscribed on Premium? Thank you, Andrew.