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September Falls

September came in like a sombre whirlwind, Eclipsing the deadening blossoms of summer. Pallid moonlight coats glistening frost, That coats the last strands of grass holding on. Embers of a pagan pyre swirl through the air, Mass ritualistic hymns ring across realms, Breaching otherworldly barriers, Evoking sacred cosmic rites, Resurrecting scattered souls. Falling bodies collapse to the slaughter, As one soul is given in exchange for another. Loss begets loss; Lightning suddenly surges through the skies, Signalling completion of an unholy ritual.

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Date: 10/6/2024 6:46:00 PM
Dear Sara, the vivid imagery you've created in your evocative verses captures the mystique of the lost light of shorter days, the killing chill of Autumn and the dark decay of the Fall season. The title of the contest takes on new nuances paired with your intriguing poem. Congratulations on your success in Andrea's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 9/30/2024 2:49:00 PM
Sara, this poem was unusual. It evoked for me the feelings I get in October or November. Is it about paganism? Congrats in my contest.
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Sara Jama
Date: 9/30/2024 5:00:00 PM
Thank you for hosting. Yes it's about Paganism. I love the dark and macabre. Also I am Pagan myself.
Date: 9/19/2024 10:28:00 PM
Dear sara! Looks like someone is listening and posting more? Yeay! The alliterations, imagery, and september related diction! Ah every line in this stands out for me grumpy! I especially loved “ Embers of a pagan pyre swirl through the air, Mass ritualistic hymns ring across realms, ” love that! I cant wait for September to end! Not my fave month but i love september prompts and uve written a seamless one! Best wishes! Sending you light always
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Sara Jama
Date: 9/20/2024 5:45:00 AM
Thank you for your support always ink.
Date: 9/19/2024 2:48:00 PM
GAAAA! Where's my cross and garlic...
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Sara Jama
Date: 9/19/2024 4:33:00 PM
Thank you for reading.
Date: 9/19/2024 2:33:00 PM
luv, fav
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Sara Jama
Date: 9/19/2024 4:32:00 PM
Thank you.

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