Separate spaces, United hearts

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Sperate the spaces, Tracking our traces We're not ever far apart, The finest composed Written with our prose We'll sing slow songs of the heart Feelings of freedom Subset is seldom Distancing, us from the start Dissolve all the years Bandage all our fears Brought this harmony so smart

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Paige Hind

Date: 11/25/2024 1:25:00 PM

Or maybe no? I just looked up that word It is a word! Sorry, my bad, lol. Sometimes you get moments of genius, lol. :)

Anonomus Scorpio
Date: 11/25/2024 3:25:00 PM

I appreciate greatly that you would even offer the constructive criticism. It means a lot to me! I thought it would be fun to be hopeful with just one word, given the context and restrictions to which this poems form has, it's required for the contest that.it is entered in. Smiling to you with reverence! A.S.

Paige Hind

Date: 11/25/2024 1:24:00 PM

Lovely rhyming! I wanted to point out the first line "Sperate the spaces" - is the first word supposed to be spelled "separate" ? I just want you and others to see the very best- I love your writings, so real. <3