Senseless

When I was one I stared at the sun And although I lost my seeing It felt like fun When I was three I drank chlorine And although I lost my tasting It felt serene When I was five I took a dive And although I lost my feeling It felt alive When I was seven I played a violin And although I lost my hearing It felt like heaven When I was nine I took a line And although I lost my smelling It felt... devine And now I'm ten with nothing else to give What a life I have lived

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Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/12/2010 10:09:00 PM

Very fine rhyming. Sounds good when read aloud

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/12/2010 8:27:00 PM

I enjoyed the poem. Keep it up

Destiny Orschell

Date: 4/12/2010 5:32:00 PM

Love the poem, John, it was different than any I've ever heard. Anyways keep on writing I'd love to hear more. -Destiny

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/12/2010 3:16:00 PM

Welcome to the Poetry Soup Family of poets.. enjoyed reading your creative write tonight..luv.. "Sweetheart" of P.S.

Faleshia Murphy

Date: 4/12/2010 12:56:00 PM

VERY GOOD WRITE AND WELCOME TO POETRY SOUP FALESHIA

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/12/2010 11:45:00 AM

I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup John. If you would like to have more of your poetry read please limit your postings to 3-5 poems per day. In doing this more of your poetry is read and other poets can also have theirs read. Wishing you the best in your writing endeavors. If you have questions please feel free to ask anyone here. We are all willing to help and if we don't know the answer we will find someone who does. Love, Carol