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Seedling Sky

Drifting languid, light upon the damp breeze, the seeds of milk weed fairy fly upon the aching air. Snow white, weightless, dancers skirts upturned before the coarser green of velvet lawn they flee. Backlit as virgin lovers upon the meadow’s spawn. The castle walls dare not belay the upward loft with daunting gray for on fragile wings in autumn damp The world is full, a whorl in white.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 10/11/2010 10:46:00 PM
Hey Deborah, thnx for leaving comments on my, "Love is Pain". I appreciate it. ...Jimmy
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Date: 10/4/2010 8:08:00 AM
assonance,consonance,alliteration, end rhyme, slant rhyme, .......this is poetry-city......I like it very much....you are a very skilled poet....sincere regards ....Syd
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Date: 10/3/2010 4:58:00 PM
I just loved that line "aching air" and the whole personification of it with the dancing seeds. REally nice one, Deb. That was sweet of you to mention my eyes in Chris' blog. You , for sure, would get one of my votes. Your honesty shines through and though. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 10/3/2010 4:40:00 AM
It is fun to see those air born seeds fly through the air..It is not fun to have them get planted in the yard or pasture..Keep the creative pen flowing.Sara
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Date: 10/3/2010 3:59:00 AM
thanks for the info much appreciated ... cant say it will be brilliant smile will do my best ive already got an idea love Jayne
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Date: 10/3/2010 3:21:00 AM
Smile wonderful verse ... Deborah whens the cut off for your comp ? smile I will have a shot at it ... and thanks for the brilliant comment on my poem its appreciated love Jayne
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Date: 10/2/2010 7:52:00 PM
Nice personification here. Yours Matthew Anish
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Date: 10/2/2010 2:36:00 PM
Very beautiful imagery of your seeds of milk weed as dancers. Your poem is enchanting ~ Sharon :)
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Date: 10/2/2010 7:54:00 AM
Wonderful painting drawn here, so enjoyed...always Michael
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Date: 10/2/2010 7:24:00 AM
You have sketched beautifully the mood of nature with its beauty and colors scenes in this lovely write. And thank you for your kind comments on my poem Wild geese. It is interesting to know that you misunderstood me gender from my name. Yes, you are right PS should also mention somewhere the gender of the poet as PS is open for everyone from any part of the world. I am sending you a soup mail about your views on my poems. Love and best wishes...Ravindra...D Guzzi
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Date: 10/2/2010 6:01:00 AM
This is rather beautiful so early in the morn on a weekend ... luv those virgin lovers in your line ..lovely words TEACH.. but RESCUED is my poem..not Dr. Ram's luv..hahaha.. u OK? haha..too many papers to correct??? haha.. just to let u know u are a sweetie .... enjoy comments from u always ..pupil..luv..
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