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Secret Contest

paralyzed patient
her chart says I fed her
I didn't

4/11/14

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Jack Horne

January 12, 2014 at 4:42 PM

ohh, clever one here, Susan - thanks very much, loved the contest

Matthew Anish

May 2, 2013 at 9:25 PM

Intresting! Are you a nurse? I like this form and you use well. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Timothy Hicks

April 22, 2013 at 11:47 PM

Wow, the implications in this were a bit of a shocker. How would you know if you fed her or not, if not for the chart? I wonder if you wish the person harm or just simply forgot. Either way, the person looks the same, and that's the worst part. A very awesome senryu! You told a much bigger story that the actual content provided. It's implications that make haiku and senryu such a pleasure to read.

Connie Marcum Wong

April 21, 2013 at 2:47 AM

Congratulations on you win with this powerful, moving senryu. Thank you also for my wonderful placement in your cherry blossom haku contest. I feel very honored.

Andrea Dietrich

April 19, 2013 at 5:31 PM

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Poet Destroyer A

April 15, 2013 at 9:10 PM

Hi Susan, if you are reading this comment after I said goodnight 2 hours ago, then this is just a recording stopping by to celebrate your secretive entry in Judy's contest. Congrats with your awesome win... always~ PD

Robert Johnson

April 14, 2013 at 3:07 PM

Deaf, dumb and blind, who knew if she'd mind. But paralization leaves lips of frustration. And stomachs that begin to talk. Congrats on your placement. :)

Samia Ali Salama

April 14, 2013 at 10:09 AM

Hi Black Eyed Susan, Congratulations on your win ... Samia

Abdulhafeez Oyewole

April 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM

This to me is a classic secret you have revealed. Congrats on your deserving win... Well done ~A.O

Bukang Liwayway

April 13, 2013 at 10:49 PM

Congrat on your win friend Susan :)

Judy Konos

April 13, 2013 at 8:51 PM

Thank you for entering my contest

Andrea Dietrich

April 12, 2013 at 7:13 PM

OH YES, Now THIS is one I like to see for the secret contest. Maybe I am wrong, but I just take it as a funny one!!

Poet Destroyer A

April 11, 2013 at 5:16 PM

I bet this nurse works where my mom's at. Susan, got to watch out for deep secrets like this. I hope it is not yours. Is it someone you know. anyways! Hope you got my message.. Have yourself a nice one, always & forever* Linda