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empty stomach eyes bagged from lunch lingering taste of the hangover hunch cotton chew of minced inner cheek dead cigarette cloak stains of the meek dreams of a bedside fountain flow through the dry mouth dream hopes for buildup to swallow to flush the liquid unclean ache of head drool glued to the bed a familiar vortex spins out of control sudden slip of equilibrium force dishonest tears to roll

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 7/31/2008 7:31:00 PM
brilliant way to put words.enjoyed it alot
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Date: 7/31/2008 11:42:00 AM
The vivid imagery forwards your thoughts in a creative way. One suggestion--I would change the category to free verse instead of prose poetry. Sad ending. Much to think about in your words. Thank you for sharing this well-written poem with us and for your kind thoughts on my poem. Keep on writing! Karen
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Date: 7/30/2008 11:55:00 PM
Nivek - Enjoyed reading your poem - I loved the last stanza and the way it just flowed off the paper and into my mind - great job - God Bless
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