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Poet Senryu

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Poetic Form: Senryu

Inspired: 2019 April 28

*3rd Place*
First Verse is a Charm
Contest Judged: 2023 November 28
Sponsored by: Jaymee Thomas

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Schizophrenic

I need my OWN mind,
Don't wrap me or cell me, just
Give me what THEY want!

anxietyconfusiondarkdeepdepressionsenryu

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Benjamin Bartley

June 2, 2024 at 7:56 PM

Impressive insanity. Love it! You've been with the poetry soup community for a while. Hours of fun reading I look forward to. I was sure glad to discover this site.

William Kelii Kekaula

June 2, 2024 at 9:30 PM

The short version, a longer version exist, if of interest--thanks, Aloha, William

Jaymee Thomas

November 28, 2023 at 4:36 PM

You managed to pack a lot of complexity into three short lines here. You are saying so much about the internal struggle with so few characters... I found myself rereading it with different emphasis on different words each time - there is a lot of layered nuance and I appreciate that flavor of creativity. Congratulations on your placement today!

William Kelii Kekaula

November 28, 2023 at 6:48 PM

Aloha, Jaymee! Admittedly surprised to have skimmed o'er Poetry Soup's formidable talent knowing that window opts a few, howbeit e'er so a privileged heart rarely accords its soul an equal favor. Mahalo always, William