Schizophrenic

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Poetic Form: Senryu

Inspired: 2019 April 28

*3rd Place*
First Verse is a Charm
Contest Judged: 2023 November 28
Sponsored by: Jaymee Thomas

Image: N/A

I need my OWN mind, Don't wrap me or cell me, just Give me what THEY want!

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Benjamin Bartley

Date: 6/2/2024 7:56:00 PM

Impressive insanity. Love it! You've been with the poetry soup community for a while. Hours of fun reading I look forward to. I was sure glad to discover this site.

Hilo Poet
Date: 6/2/2024 9:30:00 PM

The short version, a longer version exist, if of interest--thanks, Aloha, William

Jaymee Thomas

Date: 11/28/2023 4:36:00 PM

You managed to pack a lot of complexity into three short lines here. You are saying so much about the internal struggle with so few characters... I found myself rereading it with different emphasis on different words each time - there is a lot of layered nuance and I appreciate that flavor of creativity. Congratulations on your placement today!

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/28/2023 6:48:00 PM

Aloha, Jaymee! Admittedly surprised to have skimmed o'er Poetry Soup's formidable talent knowing that window opts a few, howbeit e'er so a privileged heart rarely accords its soul an equal favor. Mahalo always, William

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 4/29/2019 3:00:00 AM

Whoa. Slow up! This is wonderful!

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/3/2019 5:55:00 AM

You are a credit to the profession.

Mahtab Bangalee

Date: 4/28/2019 11:14:00 PM

beautiful

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/3/2019 5:55:00 AM

Cheers indeed.