Sanity Forsaken

Don’t leave me here alone with my thoughts entangled, ensnared wedged, caught The roaring whispers the screeching silent shouts Please stay a while longer My soul is crying out Thoughts they're racing they're playing tumbling through my mind Silence absconded misplaced I cannot find Peace be still I will seek thee Do not leave For jealousy suspicion paranoia disbelief My thoughts they lie they steal they cheat corruption deception fraud dishonesty Reasoning plays coy Sanity has forsaken me?

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Kingsley Awoh

Date: 8/26/2011 5:39:00 AM

great lines..

Rockman Pritts

Date: 8/6/2011 1:51:00 AM

Being that I don't know what the source of this poem is, it's hard to comment on. I can only determine that you have been done wrong in some way. That's sad but it's also a part of life. The joy of recovery is what keeps us smiling. I hope I'm wrong and that you were writing from imagination. As for the poem itself, it brings the point across but the form just didn't do anything for me. But then again, that's what's makes us different. At least it was good enough to make me respond. Good job.

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 8/4/2011 11:59:00 PM

A very emotional cry for help, A lot of people could identify with this. Thanks for your sweet visit.

Ingibo Benson

Date: 8/4/2011 12:14:00 PM

Wow!

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 8/4/2011 6:35:00 AM

very impressive. With a few minor adjustments, this one is publishable. drop "their" for "they're"---also, may I suggest scratching all the CAPS at the beginning of the lines? Unless the CAPS are important to you. Overall, this is an amazing piece of work. I would not mention the corrections if I did not love the poem. 7 rate and to my short list of favorites.

John Castro

Date: 8/2/2011 2:31:00 PM

nice i love this poem

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 7/31/2011 12:17:00 PM

elegant write Chiquita .. dramatic emphasis on emotion and great presentation luv.. feeling every line..