Sanity Forsaken

Don’t leave me here alone with my thoughts
entangled,
ensnared
wedged,
caught

The roaring whispers
the screeching silent shouts

Please stay a while longer
My soul is crying out

Thoughts
they're racing
they're playing
tumbling through my mind

Silence
absconded
misplaced
I cannot find

Peace
be still
I will seek thee
Do not leave

For
jealousy
suspicion
paranoia
disbelief

My thoughts
they lie
they steal
they cheat

corruption
deception
fraud 
dishonesty

Reasoning
 plays coy

Sanity
 has 
 forsaken me?

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Kingsley Awoh

Date: 8/26/2011 5:39:00 AM

great lines..

Rockman Pritts

Date: 8/6/2011 1:51:00 AM

Being that I don't know what the source of this poem is, it's hard to comment on. I can only determine that you have been done wrong in some way. That's sad but it's also a part of life. The joy of recovery is what keeps us smiling. I hope I'm wrong and that you were writing from imagination. As for the poem itself, it brings the point across but the form just didn't do anything for me. But then again, that's what's makes us different. At least it was good enough to make me respond. Good job.

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 8/4/2011 11:59:00 PM

A very emotional cry for help, A lot of people could identify with this. Thanks for your sweet visit.

Ingibo Benson

Date: 8/4/2011 12:14:00 PM

Wow!

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 8/4/2011 6:35:00 AM

very impressive. With a few minor adjustments, this one is publishable. drop "their" for "they're"---also, may I suggest scratching all the CAPS at the beginning of the lines? Unless the CAPS are important to you. Overall, this is an amazing piece of work. I would not mention the corrections if I did not love the poem. 7 rate and to my short list of favorites.