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Sandcastle Lost Not Dreams

Dream sand castle tall Waves attack for Conquest Castle lost not dreams ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- © Hitendra Mehta 10th Place - Members Contest – Sandcastle (Haiku) sponsored by S K A T -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

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Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 12/14/2010 12:32:00 PM

A very insightful and touching haiku, Hitendra. Congratulations on your win and thank you for your kind words. Love and blessings, Carolyn

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 12/9/2010 2:19:00 PM

line 1 has your subject..that's good! Line 2 has your action...good! at the end of this line which is called the CUT (by which they mean you are changing gear and showing another view of the same topic) you put 3 dots...Also NO capitalization or periods in this form. Lots of luck & I will keep checking in on the sestina!

C.C Bloomsfield

Date: 12/9/2010 3:42:00 AM

Big Congratulations,keep the ink flowing :)Celene.

Harry Horsman

Date: 12/8/2010 11:49:00 PM

this is so true in life, Hitendra, awesome poem. Harry

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 12/7/2010 9:05:00 PM

how wonderful for dreams to not have been lost! Enjoyed this one, Hitendra :) congrats on your win :) -- nikko :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/7/2010 3:24:00 PM

Congratulations on your win..Especially like the last line..Sara

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 12/7/2010 5:59:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Hitendra in S K A T*s "Sandcastle Haiku"contest. Love,Carol

John Loving Iii

Date: 12/6/2010 10:10:00 PM

we can rebuild em. john

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/6/2010 10:05:00 PM

Good one, Hitendra. You created a wonderful thought with this one. Congratulations.

Kash Poet

Date: 12/6/2010 7:39:00 PM

Congrats Hitendra on your win-kashinath

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 12/6/2010 3:45:00 PM

Congrats Hitendra on your top ten win in Irma's contest with this rare beauty entry my friend.. enjoy another big win tonight with luv..

Joe Maverick

Date: 12/6/2010 12:09:00 PM

good succinct wording Hitendra, good to see your placement and wishing you much future success.

John Freeman

Date: 12/6/2010 8:35:00 AM

Congratulations Hitendra, on your place in the winner circle, Agape, Moses

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 12/6/2010 4:38:00 AM

Thank you !!! and congrats to you also...luv Michael

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 12/6/2010 2:24:00 AM

Congratulations on this well deserved win in the contest of skat, Hitendra

C.C Bloomsfield

Date: 12/5/2010 9:51:00 PM

Many Congratulations for this well deserved win,your message goes deep beyond the castle. .Wonderful!-dear friend are you a relative of Dr.R.Mehta,cos you write as beautiful as he,and he's one of my favourite poets :)

Skat A

Date: 12/5/2010 9:43:00 PM

HITENDRA~CONGRATULATIONS! And a super thank for the nice & amazing entry. I had so much fun pretending to ride out every haiku. Many of the haiku's had more meaning to them than I expected. God bless*luv~SKAT

Tahera Mannan

Date: 12/5/2010 8:44:00 PM

Very good one Hitendra. many congratulations for this win.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/5/2010 1:03:00 PM

Good one that reads like a winner to me..Good luck. I especially like the last line..I was delighted that you stopped by, read, and commented on my work..Sara

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 12/4/2010 2:09:00 PM

castle lost not dream... quite true. it is a lesson to be learnt of the detachment.Hitendra

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 12/4/2010 1:55:00 PM

enjoyed reading your work...so true....dream big at least we will get some of them.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 12/4/2010 1:00:00 PM

Lovely sentiments Hitendra.. good luck in the contest my friend.. a super entry and wonderful thoughts... my entry is "Love Castles in the Sand".. happy weekend with luv..