Dr Hitendra Mehta Poet Haiku

Sandcastle Lost Not Dreams

Dream sand castle tall
Waves attack for Conquest
Castle lost not dreams 

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© Hitendra Mehta  

10th Place - Members Contest – Sandcastle (Haiku) sponsored by S K A T
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Carolyn Devonshire December 14, 2010 at 12:32 PM A very insightful and touching haiku, Hitendra. Congratulations on your win and thank you for your kind words. Love and blessings, Carolyn

Debbie Guzzi December 9, 2010 at 2:19 PM line 1 has your subject..that's good! Line 2 has your action...good! at the end of this line which is called the CUT (by which they mean you are changing gear and showing another view of the same topic) you put 3 dots...Also NO capitalization or periods in this form. Lots of luck & I will keep checking in on the sestina!

C.C Bloomsfield December 9, 2010 at 3:42 AM Big Congratulations,keep the ink flowing :)Celene.

Harry Horsman December 8, 2010 at 11:49 PM this is so true in life, Hitendra, awesome poem. Harry

Kabuteng P.Ink K. December 7, 2010 at 9:05 PM how wonderful for dreams to not have been lost! Enjoyed this one, Hitendra :) congrats on your win :) -- nikko :)

Sara Kendrick December 7, 2010 at 3:24 PM Congratulations on your win..Especially like the last line..Sara

Carol Sunshine Brown December 7, 2010 at 5:59 AM Congratulations on your win Hitendra in S K A T*s "Sandcastle Haiku"contest. Love,Carol

John Loving Iii December 6, 2010 at 10:10 PM we can rebuild em. john

Andrea Dietrich December 6, 2010 at 10:05 PM Good one, Hitendra. You created a wonderful thought with this one. Congratulations.

Kash Poet December 6, 2010 at 7:39 PM Congrats Hitendra on your win-kashinath

Linda-Marie Sweetheart December 6, 2010 at 3:45 PM Congrats Hitendra on your top ten win in Irma's contest with this rare beauty entry my friend.. enjoy another big win tonight with luv..

Joe Maverick December 6, 2010 at 12:09 PM good succinct wording Hitendra, good to see your placement and wishing you much future success.

John Freeman December 6, 2010 at 8:35 AM Congratulations Hitendra, on your place in the winner circle, Agape, Moses

Michael J. Falotico December 6, 2010 at 4:38 AM Thank you !!! and congrats to you also...luv Michael

Dr.Ram Mehta December 6, 2010 at 2:24 AM Congratulations on this well deserved win in the contest of skat, Hitendra

C.C Bloomsfield December 5, 2010 at 9:51 PM Many Congratulations for this well deserved win,your message goes deep beyond the castle. .Wonderful!-dear friend are you a relative of Dr.R.Mehta,cos you write as beautiful as he,and he's one of my favourite poets :)

Skat A December 5, 2010 at 9:43 PM HITENDRA~CONGRATULATIONS! And a super thank for the nice & amazing entry. I had so much fun pretending to ride out every haiku. Many of the haiku's had more meaning to them than I expected. God bless*luv~SKAT

Tahera Mannan December 5, 2010 at 8:44 PM Very good one Hitendra. many congratulations for this win.

Sara Kendrick December 5, 2010 at 1:03 PM Good one that reads like a winner to me..Good luck. I especially like the last line..I was delighted that you stopped by, read, and commented on my work..Sara

Dr.Ram Mehta December 4, 2010 at 2:09 PM castle lost not dream... quite true. it is a lesson to be learnt of the detachment.Hitendra

Doris Culverhouse December 4, 2010 at 1:55 PM enjoyed reading your work...so true....dream big at least we will get some of them.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart December 4, 2010 at 1:00 PM Lovely sentiments Hitendra.. good luck in the contest my friend.. a super entry and wonderful thoughts... my entry is "Love Castles in the Sand".. happy weekend with luv..