Beautiful Scars Poet Rhyme

Sandbags Against the Reverie of Your Woe

I stacked sandbags against the reverie of your woe,
        created a dam to ensure you’d stay safe and dry-
                  Then the tempest came and you drown in the undertow.
              I knew the risks barriers bestowed as you let go,
   you knew not I saw the whole thing; you didn’t even try. 
                   I watched the ripples in the reverie as you sank below.




June 17, 2018

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Eve Roper June 23, 2018 at 9:24 PM Congratulations on your great win, Laura, beautiful imagery :) ... Hugs Eve ~`*

Susan Gentry June 22, 2018 at 5:16 PM Congratulations on your win with this well-written poem. 1st line is killer! Said a lot in 6 lines. Beautiful Scars June 23, 2018 at 7:59 AM thanks sweet Susan :)-luloo

Susan Ashley June 20, 2018 at 8:34 PM Breathtaking in its beauty and deep sadness Laura. Congratulations on your excellent win. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan Beautiful Scars June 23, 2018 at 7:59 AM many thanks lovely lady :)-luloo

Anne-Lise Andresen June 20, 2018 at 7:09 PM - An excellent poem on 6 lines, Laura :) - It must have been difficult to judge, I think everyone is amazing, with different themes - Congratulations on a well deserved 1st place in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise: ) Beautiful Scars June 23, 2018 at 7:58 AM many thanks sweet lady :)-luloo

Mick Talbot June 20, 2018 at 7:06 PM Tear-jerkingly sad. Poetically brilliant, a winner in anyone's book! Congratulations Laura. Mick Beautiful Scars June 23, 2018 at 7:58 AM thank you Mick :)-luloo

Edward Ibeh June 20, 2018 at 4:42 PM Congratulations on your well-deserved win, Laura! Beautiful Scars June 23, 2018 at 7:58 AM many thanks Edward :)-luloo

Silent One June 20, 2018 at 3:22 PM The first line is just brilliant.. Great expressions Lulloo.. Congratulations on your first place in the contest.. Beautiful Scars June 23, 2018 at 8:00 AM you know who this is about..I cried when I read it after I wrote it . Beautiful Scars June 23, 2018 at 7:57 AM thank you so much dear man...lullooo