Notes About The Poem

This is a Dixdeux. Two lines of 10 syllables each, followed by a 2 syllable line. If more than one stanza is written then the third line becomes a refrain in the following stanzas.

Sand Castle Dreams

Warm sand runs through his fingers as he builds,
a sand castle filled with elusive dreams.
Waves splash.

Incoming tide erodes the foundation -
the castle falls and crumbles at his feet.
Waves splash.

Time and tide wash his castle out to sea.
Sighing, he takes a breath and starts over.
Waves splash.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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De Beaulieu Avatar
November 18, 2016 at 7:46 PM
The sandcastles do not stand up to water. It makes them weak. I have tried many times to build sandcastles they always fall apart.Enjoyed your poetry.
Dietrich Avatar
September 15, 2016 at 9:21 PM
gosh it looks like you have been very productive recently and there are many poems of yours I have not seen now! What an interesting form this is Kim. I did not even notice it was a particular form till I looked up and saw the poet's notes. Maybe we will be seeing it used for a contest in the future!!
Merryman Avatar
September 23, 2016 at 10:19 AM
Thank you, Andrea. My productivity comes and goes thanks to my fickle muse. A possibility of a contest with this form is very likely.
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 15, 2016 at 1:51 AM
This form is lovely Kim.it gives a poet a lot to work with. Excellent imagery. I can see the little lad starting over. ; ) 7
Merryman Avatar
September 23, 2016 at 10:16 AM
Thank you, Connie!
Allison Avatar
September 12, 2016 at 6:10 PM
oh what a charming poem and wonderful form Kim ... I feel a contest is around the next corner!:-) hugs Jan xx
Merryman Avatar
September 23, 2016 at 10:15 AM
Thank you, Jan. This could very possibly be contest material.
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