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North African sands torrid dunes expand moonlight has a tan fry an egg no pan oases are damned god forsaken land Tableau - 6 Lines Poetry Contest Sponsored by Joseph May 20/03/2021

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Jan Allison

Date: 4/2/2021 3:13:00 AM

I didn't need to see the image as your imagery was so intense, congrats on your win:-) Jugs Jan xx

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/2/2021 3:41:00 AM

Thanks Jan, I never felt the Saharan sun but I’ve experienced the blistering Nevada Desert heat, I can only imagine it’s the same, cheers David

Alexis Y.

Date: 3/26/2021 1:53:00 PM

Hi David, I agree with Sam; this is very creative. And a monorhyme too. Congratulations on your winning write. Have a great day and weekend:-) Alexis

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/26/2021 3:23:00 PM

Thank you Alexis, I’m in the mono zone at the moment, it’s weird these phases we go through in our poem’s, hope you have a wonderful week, cheers David

Joseph May

Date: 3/26/2021 1:39:00 PM

Nicely done David, Congrats on your win

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/26/2021 3:20:00 PM

Thanks Joseph, I’m delighted with your placement, great contest, cheers David

Sam Kauffman

Date: 3/26/2021 11:39:00 AM

Very creative David. The monorhyme contributes to the sense of the flow of time from an Eden to a wasteland. Congratulations on your win!

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/26/2021 3:17:00 PM

Heya Sam, thank you so much for the visit and kind comments, I seem to be in a mono rhyme frame of mind at the moment, I was trying to capture time going forward into waste, I’m delighted with the placement cheers David

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/26/2021 9:29:00 AM

I remember this one with it's cool imagery. Congrats.

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/26/2021 3:19:00 PM

Heya Andrea, I’m delighted as always to get any placement, thanks you for coming back to comment cheers David

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 3/24/2021 4:11:00 PM

Evolution What was once upon a time a garden of eden turned into grains of sand

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/25/2021 2:41:00 AM

It sure was a lush fertile landscape, cannot blame humans on this one, but the Amazon sure as hell can,

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/20/2021 3:40:00 PM

Fantastic imagery, David.

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/20/2021 4:13:00 PM

Thank you Andrea, appreciate your comments as always, cheers David

Juliet Ligon

Date: 3/20/2021 1:40:00 PM

Creative descriptions of your chosen picture. The mono rhyme flows nicely.

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/20/2021 2:11:00 PM

Heya Juliet, thanks for looking in, and nice comments, the mono makes it a bit more challenging, hopefully it works, cheers David

L Milton Hankins

Date: 3/20/2021 9:02:00 AM

Beautiful and descriptive, David. Much luck to you in the contest. You chose an interesting scene for your tableau.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/26/2021 1:39:00 PM

You sneaked in under the wire. I thought it would place higher...but, what do I know???

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/20/2021 9:24:00 AM

Heya Milton, thanks for looking in, yes indeed went for a punishing barren landscape, hope I never get lost out there, cheers David