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Saharan Tableau

North African sands
        torrid dunes expand
        moonlight has a tan
         fry an egg no pan
         oases are damned
         god forsaken land


Tableau - 6 Lines Poetry Contest
Sponsored by Joseph May
20/03/2021

Copyright © David Kavanagh | Year Posted 2021

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Jan Allison Date: 4/2/2021 3:13:00 AM I didn't need to see the image as your imagery was so intense, congrats on your win:-) Jugs Jan xx Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 4/2/2021 3:41:00 AM Thanks Jan, I never felt the Saharan sun but I’ve experienced the blistering Nevada Desert heat, I can only imagine it’s the same, cheers David

Alexis Y. Date: 3/26/2021 1:53:00 PM Hi David, I agree with Sam; this is very creative. And a monorhyme too. Congratulations on your winning write. Have a great day and weekend:-) Alexis Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 3/26/2021 3:23:00 PM Thank you Alexis, I’m in the mono zone at the moment, it’s weird these phases we go through in our poem’s, hope you have a wonderful week, cheers David

Joseph May Date: 3/26/2021 1:39:00 PM Nicely done David, Congrats on your win Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 3/26/2021 3:20:00 PM Thanks Joseph, I’m delighted with your placement, great contest, cheers David

Sam Kauffman Date: 3/26/2021 11:39:00 AM Very creative David. The monorhyme contributes to the sense of the flow of time from an Eden to a wasteland. Congratulations on your win! Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 3/26/2021 3:17:00 PM Heya Sam, thank you so much for the visit and kind comments, I seem to be in a mono rhyme frame of mind at the moment, I was trying to capture time going forward into waste, I’m delighted with the placement cheers David

Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/26/2021 9:29:00 AM I remember this one with it's cool imagery. Congrats. Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 3/26/2021 3:19:00 PM Heya Andrea, I’m delighted as always to get any placement, thanks you for coming back to comment cheers David

Christopher Flaherty Date: 3/24/2021 4:11:00 PM Evolution What was once upon a time a garden of eden turned into grains of sand Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 3/25/2021 2:41:00 AM It sure was a lush fertile landscape, cannot blame humans on this one, but the Amazon sure as hell can,

Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/20/2021 3:40:00 PM Fantastic imagery, David. Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 3/20/2021 4:13:00 PM Thank you Andrea, appreciate your comments as always, cheers David

Juliet Ligon Date: 3/20/2021 1:40:00 PM Creative descriptions of your chosen picture. The mono rhyme flows nicely. Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 3/20/2021 2:11:00 PM Heya Juliet, thanks for looking in, and nice comments, the mono makes it a bit more challenging, hopefully it works, cheers David

L Milton Hankins Date: 3/20/2021 9:02:00 AM Beautiful and descriptive, David. Much luck to you in the contest. You chose an interesting scene for your tableau. Login to Reply L Milton Hankins Date: 3/26/2021 1:39:00 PM You sneaked in under the wire. I thought it would place higher...but, what do I know??? David Kavanagh Date: 3/20/2021 9:24:00 AM Heya Milton, thanks for looking in, yes indeed went for a punishing barren landscape, hope I never get lost out there, cheers David